Scholarship / "How I chose my proposed course and institution" essay for scholarship [3]

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As witnessing the growth of industrialization of own nation, I have placed more concerns on how to increase industrial credibility to secure the current investors and to attract more investors. As Association of Southeast Asian Nations (ASEAN) Integration is coming in the near future, there would be a large-scale of investors looking for places to increase their incomes as much as their reputations. Cambodia can be one amongst the place they strive to explore considering the advantages criteria provided including low-cost of labor. As having experiences working in the field of industrial production, I firmly understand that improving productivity of manufacturing can produce more profitable results to the organization and these only occur when leaders aware how to engage properly.

As a consequence, by taking the coursework of Master of Engineering Management, I will be able to demonstrate a superior knowledge and understanding of Engineering theory and practice, managing the effective use of innovative ideas in industry, and demonstrate how to design a technology-based curriculum and the methods of leading and managing production. Having these skills and knowledge will enable me to help improving industrial productivity in Cambodia. Another reason I chose this coursework is that since Engineering Management is my favorite subject so which I earned "A" grade for this course in Bachelor Degree, I am confident to produce excellent output out of this postgraduate degree.

I have decided to attend this appropriate coursework in Melbourne University and Macquarie University, which will provide the best quality coursework that I need. Melbourne University has an outstanding reputation of excellence in teaching and research, with the most prestigious and highly regarded international rankings, and Macquarie University was awarded 5 stars in the international QS Stars rating system for its performance in teaching, facilities, innovation, and specialist criteria.

Scholarship / How will the subject contribute to my career? [4]

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Besides my goal to establish a project with the XXX which is responsible for productivity development in XXX, I would like to work in the management level of an industrial-based enterprise. Two remarkable factors firmly support my main goals behind obtaining Master of Engineering Management.

First and foremost, after completing the coursework of Master of Engineering Management, I will gain a deeper understanding of the legal, commercial and human resource issues that a manager deals with in a technical environment. For instance, I will be familiar with supervising maintenance requirements to optimize efficiency as well as interpreting plans, drawings and specifications and providing advice on engineering methods and procedures to achieve construction and production requirements. Moreover, not only will it provide me with the skills required at the management level of technology-based enterprises, but also it will provide the financial, investment, evaluation and business skills necessary to operate in diverse areas.

Secondly, graduation in Master of Engineering Management shows a great promise in a broad development of marketable attributes such as leadership, creativity, high ethical standards and professionalism, communication, and strong analytical skills. Within the academic year, students are also encouraged to practice their English language skills wherever possible, network and get involved in the university and community to improve the effectiveness of communication. In addition, there is a large opportunity to increase intercultural awareness as well as to develop new insights and understandings through the formation of new relationships which will gradually help me in acquiring the strength from diversity. All these significant characteristics are essential for leaders in most organizations particularly the industrial-based organizations.

Scholarship / How have I contributed to implementing change or reform in my organization. [2]

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Question: How have you contributed to solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform? (Be specific and include: what aspect/s of your leadership knowledge, skills and practice you consider to be well established and effective; which people or organizations you worked with to solve the problem; and what creative methods were used.)

After six-months working in Secondary Manufacturing Department (SMD) as Shift Executive, I realized that a major issue which impacted the productivity of the production was the lack of skill development for my technicians. There were no visible structures, or records about technical-skill development and no certainty about the people who were in charge in technical training. As a consequence, there were no actual evidences on what skills technicians required to improve, and I believed it was the time to make reformation.

I started to plan out my ideas before I called out the expert team from Production Engineering Department (PED) to a meeting. For nearly one month, we sat down for hours discussing about steps to develop our people's technical skills until, one day, the agreement was reached. First, we created skill assessment papers and lessons for each level of people such as newcomer level, operator level, and technician level by writing down questions about every pieces of the machine. After that, we started to do skill assessments by using both paper assessment and on-job assessment. After collecting data from the assessments, we started to categorize people into different groups determined by their score, and each senior technician from PED was in charge for each group. They were required to provide tracking records for each individual after six-months training about what skills have been learnt and what area should be improved. Lastly, the records were kept as references for the next development cycle. Through this project, I realized that communication, commitment, and respect were vital characteristics to deliver this project to succeed.

Despite the fact that I successfully completed this project, my knowledge and capability are still inadequate to produce significant changes in my workplace and that is when the desire to pursue a Master of Engineering Management comes in.