Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Most people lives in small vilage [4]

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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

With the movement of lifestyle, family life in the village is not the same experience as in the big city, because the community is small which people solely know a few people in their circumstances. While, some people believe that there are benefits and drawbacks of it, I believe that there is a positive impact for this trend.

With regard to the drawbacks of little community, inhabitants believe that it is not acceptable for several reasons. They are easily to feel bored in doing the same activities as farmer or labor every day. For instance, they always go to work in the early morning and then back home in the evening. In addition, the people always meet up the same person in their little circumstances, so they solely have limited connection globally. It is evident that none of them would improve their lives.

On the other hand, I would agree that living in a small community has benefit. Firstly, it creates a close relationship among families. For instance, recent studies confirm that the majority of Indonesian villagers have many social activities in different types of activity like reciting Al-Quran together once a week. As a result, people who live in a few communities get more kinship relationship in each family.

To sum up, although the majority of people argue that live in small community addresses some benefit, I would argue that there are disadvantages for those who have a quality time in their little environment.

Writing Feedback / What is the effect of modern interaction between people in human social lives? [2]

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the recent years, there has been a movement of modern communication particularly email and social messaging that has decreased the amount of people's time to meet up one another. This trend addresses a negative impact on their social lives. Although some people believe that this trend has brought the negative side, there are also the positive developments of modern communication.

There are some benefits of modern communication in human social life. First and foremost, people can communicate easily. They can communicate with their friends in the other parts of the world as easy as they want. In addition, modern communication is efficient for the human social life. People do not need to waste their time to meet up with others to hang out. Furthermore, the modern communication can improve human social life since it can share many different types of information. As a result, people's lives are much more convenient today.

The main disadvantage of modern communication is that people can be individualism because they are solely hectic in their social messaging. For example, in mean time, numerous human beings always focus on their gadgets to keep in touch with their friends in another place when they meet up. As a result, mankind ignore what is happens with their surroundings.

To sum up, although modern communication brings the drawback for human social life, I would agree that there are numerous positive sides of technology progress. Where possible, this trend increases significantly in the future so as that we can continue to enjoy the benefits of modern communication.