Writing Feedback / Compare/Contrast Essay - Similarities and differences between Me and my Brother [5]

Choose a topic and submit a Comparison/Contrast Essay. The Essay should be 4-5 paragraphs.

Me Versus My Brother

My brother and I are two individuals with few similarities and many differences. People often say that Chris, my older brother, and I are polar opposites. Though however few, there are still similarities that we share as siblings.

First of all, we were both brought up by an amazing pair of parents that put all of their effort into raising us to the best of their ability. We were spoiled, and of course are still spoiled with our parent's affection. We were both taught to cherish life, and the people in it. Besides our upbringing, we also share in certain beliefs. For example, even though we were both raised as Christians, church and all, we chose not to be religious. We agree that such labels are not important, and that faith is something one has to find on their own. We share many memories from our childhood of playing in the woods, making forts, laughing, fighting and even crying. Both of us have had our own share of hardships, but have pulled through by remembering the good, and the good that became of them. Regardless of these similarities, we are both separate individuals with our own set of opinions, influences, and many other things in our life, that have made us into the "polar opposites" that people see today.

One of the most obvious differences, is our appearance. My brother, clearly a male, and me, a female. We have different biological fathers, but he looks so much like our mother that you wouldn't guess that we are only half siblings. Our mom is Korean, and our dad is White American. I take after Dad, but looks are just the beginning of our differences. I matured at a very young age, surprising even myself at times, while my brother only just recently began to mature. I am very understanding and I have a lot of patience unlike Chris who is not a very patient person. I have always been one to prefer entertaining myself with books, pencil and paper. I am a very happy introvert. I like having a few close friends to hang out with every other weekend, and other days spent relaxing and exploring my creativity. Chris on the other hand, is a social butterfly. He loves to be surrounded by people, and being the center of everyone's attention. He has a wonderful sense of humor, and usually is the one making the jokes. Chris is the kind of person who finds it very easy to suck up to those with a higher authority, even when that person or persons are wrong. I cannot do that with ease. To me, when someone is wrong, knows very well that they are wrong, and still refuses to admit it, I find it hard to be able to just smile and nod. When I do something I have to do it right, or not at all.

I could write several more paragraphs explaining our differences, but that could take eternity. Growing up so close in age, my brother and I have a very tight bond. We know we are different, and love each other more because of it. Hearing people say we are polar opposites does not hurt our feelings, in fact it is rather pleasing to hear because of those few things we do share; things we can share and still be the individuals that we are. I have never wished for my brother to be any other way than the way he is now, and I expect he has not wished for me to be any other way than the me I am today either.

~ Please feel free to criticize anything you see that does not look right. No need to tip toe, I know that I am not perfect! :) Also if you could please let me know what you think of my thesis statement I would really appreciate it. Intros are not my forte... so any and all advice is welcomed with open arms !!~

Thank you in advance!!! [/^,^]/

Essays / Persuasive Essay on topic something other than school uniforms, lunch quality and double standards [3]

For this lesson, choose a topic and submit a Persuasive Essay. The Essay should be 4-5 paragraphs. You may choose your topic; however, choose something substantial enough to include solid support. Closely look at the rubric below for the assignment grading criteria and make sure your topic can meet all the requirements. ( don't worry about the rubric, that is for me)

Can you give me a few essay topic suggestions? Something not too difficult, though I don't mind doing a little research.

I don't want to write on something I have already written, so please suggest something other than these:
- School uniforms/ No uniforms
- School lunch quality
- Double standards for boys and girls/ No double standards

I just need a little push to help me get started because I can't seem to find a topic that I would be interested in writing about.

Thank you in advance!!! <3

Letters / Multi-Genre Fiction Assignment Sheet / Acceptance Letter [2]

Multi-Genre Fiction Assignment Sheet

Over the course of the semester we have studied a wide variety of genres. Now here is your chance to try them out for yourself!

Your fiction piece must include at least 5 genres. The genres listed below are only suggestions. There are many more that may be used. Length will vary depending on which genres you choose to include, however it will probably be at least 2 pages in length.

Topic: Write a multi-genre fiction piece about a problem a high school student may have.

Acceptance Letter

Today is a very special day. One that only occurs once every three years. It is the day that both Carmilla and her best friend Lycia will find out if they have been accepted or not. The day that they will receive a letter, informing them of whether or not they made it into the Secret Monster Species High School. The most magnificent, unparalleled school for Monsters on the planet. The school that could change both of their lives.

Carmilla Bathory never knew her parents; they died shortly after her birth, and she has been living with the Lupins' ever since. Lycia is the only daughter of Xanthus and Lenora Lupin. The Lupins' are Werewolves, but Carmilla being a Vampire, never felt or feels unwelcomed, or out of place. They have always treated her as part of the family. Carmilla does not know much about her species, and hopes that she will be able to learn more at the Secret Monster Species High School.

Carmilla does not sleep, so waiting for the letter to arrive seemed like eternity. She couldn't sit still while thinking of the highly probable outcome of being rejected by the academy. She kept worrying that not knowing her family background would be a heavy factor in the schools' decision. Carmilla is the type of being that sees the best in everyone else, and belittles her own obvious talents. Not knowing much about Monsters, or her own species, and is not aware of her obvious talent and skills, Carmilla began to walk the perimeter of the house, stressing in her silent worries.

Lycia's family has a long lineage of Secret Monster Species graduates, so Carmilla was positive that Lycia would be accepted. Lycia has also inherited the gift that runs in her family. She is a 'seer'. Her gift alone guarantees her a position in the school.

As she lapped the house, she could hear each of the Lupins' steady breathing, and an occasional snore coming from Lycia's room. The sound of them peacefully sleeping calmed her down, and she decided she would calmly wait for the letters inside. She realized she was probably overstressing, and she probably had nothing to worry about.

About an hour passes till Lycia wakes up and joins Carmilla downstairs to wait for the letters to arrive. Even though they know that the letters are going to be arriving sometime today, neither of them actually know exactly how the letters are going to arrive, or in what form they will be received in. Both of them flinch when they hear the trees rustle and the wind blow up against the house. They look at each other and giggle soft hums of laughter.

It is about seven forty-five A.M.; suddenly, both Carmilla and Lycia stiffen. One being a vampire and the other having better hearing that that of a wolf, their extremely keen, acute senses alert them of something about eight miles off in the distance. They can hear clearly, the fluttering of something flying through the trees. A steady, rhythmic beat flying closer towards the house. They have never heard any creature make sounds such as these. It is mesmerizing. So mesmerizing, that they knew. This was it. This is the moment they are waiting for; it is literally flying towards them.

" It's finally here...," Carmilla sings in a soft, nervous whisper. She reaches her hand out to Lycia's and holds it in hers, giving it a reassuring squeeze.

Lycia nods and they both walk out the door; in just three seconds, they reach the back door. They walk out to the yard and face in the direction of the movement. Waiting for the creature to arrive, they listen to the wind being beaten down on; the beautiful, tranquil whooshing of what must be its wings. Whatever it is, it is getting louder; the trees are rustling, sending the birds and animals scattering.

Distracted by the contents of the letters, neither of the girls noticed that the rest of the family had woken up and gathered by the back-door. Xanthus and Lenora, failing at holding back on their smile, were making it obvious that they knew what was heading towards them. Having both graduated from the S.M.S. Academy, they are just as excited, if not more, for the contents of the letters to arrive. Lycia's oldest brother, Zeke, was indifferent. He seemed to think it was obvious that they would both be accepted.

Only moments pass when the creature glides to a landing a few yards away from where Carmilla and Lycia were standing. It looks like a bird, only it was about 12 feet high, with a wing span of about three times its height. It had a thick cylindrical object in its claws. It kind of looks like a scroll of sorts. It is white with gold knobs at the ends.

Lycia stares at the creature with her mouth gaping. Her father, Xanthus, walks over and puts his rather large hand on her shoulder and laughs. His deep roar of a laugh, brought Lycia back to the moment. She closes her mouth and smiled a nervous smile.

Carmilla was mesmerized by the beautiful creature. Without realizing what she was doing, she began to slowly walk towards it. The Lupins' watched and she proceeded to advance towards the giant bird. Her hand reaches out like she is under a spell of sorts. The bird straightens out and begins to observe, as Carmilla makes her way. The bird appears to be very bright, or rather wise. It almost seems as if it is eager for her to reach it. She is only a few feet away now, when the bird raises the scroll and bows. Lycia's mother and father look at each other and shrug. This is new to them. When they received their letters, it didn't happen like this. The bird came, dropped the scroll, and flew off once they read it. It was indifferent when it had come to deliver the letters to them at their time of acceptance into the academy. They are assuming it is because both Lycia and Carmilla are getting their letters at the same time, but it still does not explain the fondness it is showing towards Carmilla.

Carmilla is standing directly in front of the bird now, and she can hear a beautiful lull coming from its chest. She is beginning to process what she had just done, and she freezes up. The bird raises its small head and cocks it to the right, staring at her, waiting for her to grab the scroll. When her eyes meet the birds, she suddenly feels warm, and happy. All her stress and nervousness disappears. She somehow understands what the bird wants and she grabs the scroll.

Carmilla begins to open the scroll, when she is suddenly blinded by a bright flash of light. Her sensitive eyes takes a few minutes to adjust before she tries again. The light is softer now, but it is blank. There are no words. She turns her head to look at Mr. Lupin, "What do I do now?" she asks him. He does not say anything. He just smiles his big toothy smile. He points at the scroll, raising his eyebrows and he smirks. She looks back at the scroll and words begin to be inscribed.

Dear Ms. Bathory,
We, of the Secret Monster Species High School, are delighted to inform you of your acceptance into Secret Monster Species High! We are looking forward to the incredible privilege of teaching someone of such rare lineage, such as yourself! Your thirst for knowledge intrigues us. We have high expectations. Your dorm room is prepared and ready for you.

Congratulations! You have been accepted!
We are awaiting your arrival! Don't keep
Us waiting too long!

Sincerely,
Selene Semele

As Carmilla reads the letter, she begins to cry. Her vision is getting blurry, and she laughs an awkward laugh. Everyone looks at her and howls, "Congratulations Milly!" They all rush over and hug her all at once almost toppling over.

Carmilla glances at the scroll again and a new message begins to appear.

What are you waiting for? Give the scroll to Lycia, you fool.

Stunned by what she just read, she weaves her hand through the pile of Lupins' and hands the scroll over to Lycia. The Lupins' begin to crawl off of Carmilla as they wait for Lycia's reaction. Lycia reads the scroll, and everyone begins to shout as she raises her hand in the air and winks at everyone confirming her acceptance.

The bird walks over to Carmilla, and nudges its head against her hand. Carmilla smiles, and caresses the bird's small beak. She smiles and nods as she understands that it is time for it to head back to the academy. She doesn't know why, but she feels a strong connection with him. Everybody watches as the giant bird takes off. Once the bird is no longer within the range of their vision, the head inside.

Both girls have been accepted into Secret Monster Species High School. Xanthus and Lenora congratulate both of the girls. Lenora looks at them both, and she says excitedly, "I just knew that the both of you were going to get in! I prepared gifts."

 

Any thoughts would be greatly appreciated. I tried to stay in present tense, and I think I corrected everything, but if you see something let me know please! :)

I hope you enjoyed reading it!!!