Letters / Motivation letter for Erasmus mundus scholarships - English isn't first language [6]

Hi!
First time here,
I'm attempting to write and exceptional motivation letter for a unique scholarship to Groninger University. I'm very honest with what I say in my letter and I mean every single word but I'm afraid it sounds fake or overdone or just sounds pointless and too extensive. Tips ? Ideas? Criticism is welcome just have in mind english isn't my native language.

Dear Madam, Sir,

Through the following words I hope to express my interest and my strong desire to participate in the Erasmus program at the University of Groningen. I am currently a student of Psychology at the Universidad Nacional Autonoma de Honduras.

I'll start quite bluntly; Throughout my short life, I've seen my country destroy itself. This destruction has not only taken place through extreme violence and corruption, but through the deadliest of all, ignorance. I live by the words of one of the most influential leaders of the xx century, Peter F. Drucker : " Today knowledge has power. It controls access to opportunity and advancement." Mr. Drucker believed we should work with our minds and not only with our hands, for the real key to progress lies in what dwells in our mind, more specifically, on our thinking. And he was not speaking solemnly for academic intelligence, but about wisdom, about creativity, about the ability to generate thoughts that will furthermore give birth to life-changing ideas.

I want to have life-changing ideas, applying to this program is definitely one, especially if I were to get accepted, but even trying feels fulfilling already. And this is what my country needs to do: try.

My ultimate goal upon completion of my bachelor degree is to get a master at forensic psychology. In Honduras, there is only one forensic psychologist, and in a country OPTION A (where violence prevails in the behavior of people) OPTION B (that is consumed by violence and criminality), we can't afford to have such a limited number of people in the field. I strongly believe psychology needs a voice in the study and handling of violence in Honduras; it would do so much good! My country needs to stop ignoring and neglecting the need for the participation of the social sciences, including psychology's intervention in terms of mental health

Social sciences play an important role in the wellbeing of society. In essence, they act out the same tasks in humanity, they must feel it, suffer it and enjoy it in order to understand it and furthermore work with it. I consider myself to have the aptitudes a social scientist needs, specially because I have a great sense of social sensibility and initiative.

Even though my time at college has been short, and the classes I've taken, few, I can confidently assure that the study of psychology has enlightened me in a way that I never thought possible; I love my career. If anything, I hope to have a life changing experience before I can start helping others change their lives.

Groninger is my first choice,not is its location appealing, nor does it only range among the top 100 universities in the world for psychology ( and I WANT high quality education) but it is also authentically international and warmly welcomes students from all over the world. I have a deep appreciation for diversity. The thought/idea of coexisting in the midst of cultural diversity is truly fascinating! It sounds challenging; definitely an experience that would turn my life around.

Straightforwardly, I consider myself to be such aforesaid kind of individual. Absorbing and understanding the NEEDS of a collapsing society in terms of mental health and responding to such exigencies in the most socially sensitive way, will be my contribution.

I very much appreciate the time and consideration you've given to my application,

Rosemary Ochoa.