Undergraduate / 'spirit of education' - Syracuse University Questions: Hasn't been seen by anyone! [2]

Since I moved to the United States 15 years ago, I have lived in a total of four states. My dad is currently a full time? professor at Syracuse University, the first school that out of any of the colleges my father has worked at, has actually caught my attention.

... acquiring the knowledge and skills needed to receive a professional Bachelor of Architecture degree.
... I thought I would only leave with some brochures.
... speaking enthusiastically about study abroad opportunities in Florence and London, recent [...] beating out various architecture firms. Never before have I had such a personal college visit, enriched by the passion and spirit of the faculty.

I would say something like: Never before on any of my other college visits, had I felt so personally connected to the school and its faculty.

Undoubtedly, it was Syracuse University's spirit of education that influenced me to apply. My dad, as a professor, and the faculty at the School of Architecture, like Amy and Michael, showed me that Syracuse University genuinely cares about each individual student. << I like this last part but HOW do they show you that syracuse genuinely cares about each student?

your other essay sounds good, a bit on the short side though.

Undergraduate / "Most of the things worth doing in the world had been declared impossible before they were done" [5]

The wide majority of people..

It's interesting and probably different from what other people have written. I know it's hard to write a lot in 250 words but I'd say you focus more on what YOU personally would do instead of all of the facts you are giving about Morocco.

Undergraduate / Ever since I began high school as a short, geeky freshman, I could not wait for college WHY SYRACUSE [5]

Thank you everyone. I actually fixed the essay up a bit, if you guys could comment suggestions about this, that'd be great. I also added the second supplement. I wasn't sure how I could edit my original post (sorry new to this site)

Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University? (Maximum: 250 words)

I started high school a geeky freshman, and from then on I could not wait for college. I spent endless hours researching colleges until one day, I found Syracuse, the perfect institution for a person like me. I have a passion for history, so I proceeded to research all about Syracuse's history major. Scrolling through the PDF of courses offered on my brightly lit computer screen, classes such as Modern American Presidency, Modern American Political Thought, and Women in America: Civil War to the Present jumped out at me. I love history and learning about the past, but I am also very interested in learning about what is happening in the present, such as politics. Additionally, Syracuse's newspaper, The Daily Orange, is regarded as one of the best college newspapers in the country. Being Editor-in-Chief of my high school newspaper, I enjoy writing articles and designing pages for our student run newspaper, just like Syracuse's. I have a passion for informing my peers, staff and administrators of things going on around them, as I have shown through my involvement with my high school's newspaper, The Eagle. The Daily Orange reports on a variety of topics ranging from Syracuse's sports teams to news stories about things happening around campus. I would love to have the privilege of coming to Syracuse and working for one of the best college newspapers in the country.

Who is the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University can help you achieve this? (Maximum: 250 words)

I hope to be someone that stands up for those who are too afraid to speak up for themselves. My school newspaper, The Eagle, has set a goal to educate our students on issues they may not have been thinking about before they read about them in our newspaper. One of my favorite issues by our paper was the stress, depression, body image, and students with divorced parents issue published during the 2014-2015 school year which focused on many things students typically hear about, but probably would have never known to what extent others around them were affected by these issues (we interviewed and surveyed many students and used their responses in the paper). We shed light on sensitive topics so that students who are too afraid to speak up on their own can be heard through our newspaper. We also published a police misconduct and racial stereotyping in America issue which shed a new light on the issue many students never thought about as many students in our school have (thankfully) never experienced police misconduct. We did not try to choose a side in the citizens vs police debate, we simply brought all of the facts we collected on both parties and shared them with our students to make them more informed. Informing students about situations like these has helped to make my high school a more tolerant environment.