Undergraduate / "Gold, Garnet and Gray" - sharing my story for college application [3]

I think your essay have many ideals, so I give you my opinion about this:

I enjoy looking at the different colors and shades of my life . When I grow older, I find myself using colors as a way better understanding and defining who I am and the world around me.

Personally , I am neither black nor white. Many aspects of my life are made up of many dualities, sometimes contradictory, that manage to mix and create whom I am. As the first generation Jamaican-American (Big up Jamrock), there are many aspects of myself that derives from the Jamaican side of me, such as the music that I listen too and the foods that I enjoy. At the same, being born and raised in America that has left a huge impression on the way I think which tends to be less traditional.

There are much more phenomena in my life that define me because I fall short of what is considered the normal.

I like to say that I am a minority of minorities. I find myself being the only Black person in most of my classes.

I believe I have just as much to offer Florida State, as it have to offer to me.
Joining FSU would be a great opportunity to share my unique perspective of the world, and to learn the unique perspectives of others who are in that gray zone.

Undergraduate / Short Franklin and Marshall sups: Why F&M/Who would I want to be in a day? [4]

I can give you som ideals in grammar.
1. Were I given the chance to become anyone in one day, I would choose to ...
I'm always highly aware of the balanced connections between others and a street singer that help me use the vigor ...

I sing under my face mask on the street, singing in my building's non-camera elevator, singing whenever I'm alone.

I imagine of a scene in which I and my plain antique guitar, share my stories (...) other people's sharings as they stop by and sing with me. No spotlight, no fame, no distance, existing between us is only the strong thread of music and our common interest occur in my soul .

2. ... as I hope to become a student in the college environment where I can ...
... development with vibrant intert wined intellectual and social life. I look forward to the day when I am a part of one of the houses, joining ...

Writing Feedback / The graph provide an information on the fish and different kind of meat consumption among Europeans. [3]

thank you so much Vangiespen, Could you give me some mistakes of this essay?
topic: Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different view about whether punishments for crimes should be fixed. Although there are some advantages of fixed punishment, I believe that it is better to judge each crime individually.

There are some good arguments for having one set punishment for each crime. Firstly, it is easy to make a fair justice system. For instance, death penalty also called capital punishment for corruptors in Indonesia and only death punishment has to prevent the crime rates in community. Secondly, everyone is aware of the punishment for each crime that could deter the number of offenders in their own country over decades.

However, I would argue that the circumstances of a crime and the criminal's motivation should have an influence on the punishment. Stealing for profit in comparison with stealing to feed family is differently responsible for acting. For example, the first group has bad characteristics such as laziness or selfishness that could also breed future offenders who steal for profit. Others choose as thieves, instead of working hard to make an honest living. All situations should be judged following the legal system. Another case is that people do not have enough money to make ends meet, they will be tempted to purse illegal activities just to support themselves and their families. In this case, each crime individually should be considered to reducing punishment.

In conclusion, while a number of people think that each type of crime should be fixed punishment, I would argue that they should be judged taking both the circumstances and motivation account.

Writing Feedback / Discuss different views and show what do you think about fix punishment [5]

thank you so much^^

Writing Feedback / Discuss different views and show what do you think about fix punishment [5]

thank you so much, I will try my best to write the next essay