Posts by Irvinhi

Irvinhi

Jun 1, 2016

Writing Feedback / Whereas rehabilitation can heal druggies from the narcotic adiction, jail will give deterrent effect [4]

My introduction:
Narcotics is treacherous. There are myriad number of people who used deadening drugs. Majority people say yes to put drug user in prison, while some people argue that they should rejuvenate. This essay will discuss about both point of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

Irvinhi

Jun 1, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 (Practice) Many people depend on their cars for everyday domestic, social and working [4]

Here my conclusion:
To conclude it, over-using car can leads to major problems such as traffic congestion and defilement air. Government should acts as soon as possible in order to reduce this problem by starting create strict policy or at least campaign. I strongly believe this motion is undebateable issue anymore, in the light of a far mentioned evidence.

Irvinhi

Jun 1, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Estimated percentage of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers, 2005 [6]

A breakdown of the figure for the number of car trips by purpose and gender of drivers in 2005. As seen in the chart, it is important to notice that "work" broke the record as the highest proportion compared with others. While visiting town hit the low.

The vast proportion comes from work, almost reached Three fifths. This was followed by shopping, one fifth. Recreation was popular one in Man side, approximately 10 percent, while the women side just less than 5 percent. It seems women rarely visiting town, it can be seen that it just about 3 percent, while men was biased, about half one fifth.

A part of previous comparison, the lowest reach was bank and running errands by men, approximately less than 5 percent. Visiting friends almost 5 times as much as work. It obvious that Women prefer to running errands than visit her friends. The different work of men and women look likely just slightly, about 10 percent.

how much the score? thank you.

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