Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (PROBLEM OF FAST FOOD FOR CHILDREN AND HOW TO COPE THAT PROBLEM) [2]

Due to the tight schedule humans have, more working families are in favor of fast food to be consumed by their children. What problem will be emerged because of this phenomenon and how to cope with that problem?

Nowdays, people's mobility are increasing rapidly. Because they have tight schedule every day, some working families decide fast food or instant food to fulfill their consumption. That food will be consumed by their children and might make problem such as obesity in early age. Their parents should maintain their children's food and weight, and become positive role model to support them for spending much time actively playing outside or do some physical activities together with them.

Busy families who cook less and eat fast food out more can be contributed to make children having obesity. Undoubtedly, there is not much nourishment in fast food. The children who are obese because of it can cause another risk of serious health problems, such as diabetes, heart attack, and asthma in early age. Moreover, childhood obesity make emotional toll which lead them to have low self-esteem, negative body image, and depression. Therefore, it needs role of parent to control their children's food and weight to prevent that problem does not happen.

The parent can avoid that problem with applying healthy food and lifestyle in daily activities. Because children have been mimicking their parent, it is the perfect way to become positive role model for their child. For instance, they start to cook more and make home-cooked with good nutrition and suitable food proportion while tell them the function of healthy food for their better development. In addition, they invite them to do some their family's enjoyable sport at outside while inform the beneficial some physical activities to keep themselves healthy.

Preventing children have obesity in young age needs role of parent to cope that problem. Their parent should preserve good nutrition and healthy food for their children. To maintain their weight, parents should show the positive figure with introducing healthy lifestyle by still active and exercise or do some simple sport with their children.

Writing Feedback / (IELTS ES) Summary the one of National Geoghaphic's article [3]

It is the Susan O'Keefe's journey with her husband for Nat Geo Expeditions. they have visited the Canadian Rockies. The trip have started from Calgary to Vancouver. In that spot they made plenty of stops along the way, including Banff and Jasper National Parks and Whistler and Victoria, British Columbia for 12 days.

First, they spent time at Elaho-Squamish River with their favorite activity which is water rafting. They felt amazing sensation when they should traverse terrain otherwise inaccessible way. This is not wasted journey because they got the impressive views of the world's most glaciated mountain range. Not only throwing the river but also climbing up a rock ledge and jumping into a pool of chilly blue water that they did it.

In the beautiful Lake Louise in Banff National Park, they knew about uniquely colorless lake with snowcapped peaks landscaping the scent of fresh forest pine. In that spot there is historical place as called as Lake Agnes Tea House that provide good tasted hot tea and best homemade desserts. Hiking in the Athabasca Glacier is the great choice. It is not hard to see Canadian wildlife in that place, such as mountain goats, caribou, grizzly bears, wolves, moose, and so on.

At the night they tried to watch incredible late sunset and stargaze in Miette Hot Spring which is still one area with Jasper National Park that is considered the second largest dark sky preserve in the world and hosts of stargazing events.

In western coast of Vancouver Island, they took a long coastal hike with accompanied by best landscape of Olympic Peninsula, revealing blue skies, and sparkling Pacific water. As travel cover, they visited Victoria which rich about traditional cultural attraction and mouth-watering seafood cuisine.

From mountain peaks to massive glaciers and Tiffany blue lakes, there was spectacular scenery everywhere they looked, and remarkable experience for them.