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Atchane

Jun 16, 2016

Writing Feedback / Florida. Someone correct for me this paragraph, i want to know the mistakes i had made. [8]

Florida is a famous city and a beautiful place for visitors. First, it has many places, such as the sea, a lot of people went to the beach in the summer to have fun. A feature of the beach is that there are magical things, for instance, food, music, and a lot of games made in the sand. Second, it has a big annual festival, every year come lots of people around the world to attend that big event. Third, Florida has a great location between Orlando and Miami. Which has health weather, "it is not bad", also site among the seas. All these things make Florida looks magical and the most beautiful place for people to travel to.

Atchane

Jun 16, 2016

Writing Feedback / Florida. Someone correct for me this paragraph, i want to know the mistakes i had made. [8]

Thank you so much, It was really helpful, all that you had said are helpful. (y)

Atchane

Jun 16, 2016

Writing Feedback / Florida. Someone correct for me this paragraph, i want to know the mistakes i had made. [8]

Thank you so much, my friend, It's really helpful.

Atchane

Jun 21, 2016

Writing Feedback / Florida. Someone correct for me this paragraph, i want to know the mistakes i had made. [8]

Thank you justivy for advices (y)

Atchane

Jun 23, 2016

Undergraduate / A short essay about me for three or four days [7]

It is my first paragraph , I would like someone will correct It for me and give an important advice.
I am writing a short paragraph about myself for three or four days.
It is not easy to write a paragraph as I think, but as we knew "the practices make perfect"

Atchane

Jun 24, 2016

Writing Feedback / A COMPARISON OF TRIPS UNDERTAKEN BY CARS BASED ON GENDER - WRITING IELTS TASK 1 [3]

Dear Ilankelo,
I think your essay really good
Next time try to use passive voice in your writing It's will be more perfect.

Use passive voice when the sentence object is more important than the subject. The active voice is generally easier to read.

Examples (subject, object)

Before: Our results will be discussed.
After: We will discuss our results.

Overall, it can be noticeable that both women and men utilised car for working (...) for visiting a friend.

To begin, more men used a car to go to work with ...
Other remaining data account for less than 10 percent ~~respectively~~ .

... higher than double for the rate of shopping Did you mean space?~~pace~~ standing at the second pace. This is followed by the use of a car to go to a course at around 12%, while ...

I hope It's will be helpful.

Atchane

Jun 24, 2016

Writing Feedback / What a strategies you have to adopt to be a good listener? Someone correct me this paragraph. [4]

EF members and friends and family. someone correct me this paragraph.

I had written this paragraph in my exam composition. I hope I will can get a good note.

What a strategies you have to adopt to be a good listener?

We should adopt a strategies to become a good listener. Firstly, we have to be interesting, which when the speaker offer his topic we must pay attention. Secondly, taken notes during the meeting, for example if we do not understand some words, we take notes to translate them, also taken notes help us to remember things. Finally, hold back, trying to let remarkes until the speaker finish his topic, do not stop him to ask question. Good listener have to be interesting, understanding and has a relationship between him and the speaker, that will let him be a good listener.