Posts by bornStunna15

bornStunna15

Aug 12, 2016

Writing Feedback / Summary, National Geographic This Chart Shows How U.S. Carbon Emissions Are Rising-Again [5]

Hello Halim 15,
I would like to give you some inputs regarding your writing.
overall your writing is already dope.

The companies could produce of many kind of production.
... that is bad for environment because of air pollutant(pollution) , both ~~(of~~ people or animal in the world. Secondly, U.S has been growing ~~for~~ its future economic.

We can see if the United State (Is) still ~~for~~ surviving with its production ...

... that has not been conclusion (concluded) until (up) now.

Additional info: ()= additional word and strikethrough= removed

Thank you.-
(I'am a student of English course, so if my inputs are wrong just let me know, it will help me enormously.)

bornStunna15

Aug 12, 2016

Writing Feedback / Summary an article : Parents Giving Unproven IQ-Boosting Drugs to Kids with Down's [3]

Hi, Fadhila. Iam about to give you some of my thought on your writing

the researcher founded (Found itself already in form of V3, so you dont need to add more "ed" in the end of "nd")

not yet to tested= has not yet tested (because it is sounded naturally to me because you are telling about something that "is-not-already" so using an "has" will perfectly fit in this context)

Thank you, CMIIW

bornStunna15

Aug 12, 2016

Writing Feedback / Summary out of an article: Sports help heal in the darkest of times [2]

The bombing attack which happened in Boston Marathon in 2013 has changed people's thought toward that annual race. The grief and the hatred are something have in common among people throughout the world, particularly people of Boston when they know for first time about that heinous attack. However, those feeling can be recovered by recalling the true meaning of sport itself. The sport are part of American tradition and it has been helping out people to create tough character and shape the value of togetherness. The aftermath of that attack will forever be remembered and always be linked to Boston as a single part yet, the healing actually does exist within this tragedy.

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