Writing Feedback / Too much of financial dissonance in this world [4]

Your structure is good. On the other hand, you have made many grammar mistakes and I think you should work on that part of your writing.

As the citizens of one's country, being need in food - written like that this sentence doesn't make any sense. You should restructure your whole sentence

.... faces by developing the country

.... by facilitating them with electricity.

....On the other hand, the government should

..... over time by co-operating with the United Nations.

government of poor nations - the governments!

Writing Feedback / Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000 [5]

That is definitely not a good overview. It would be better to make a clear overview, to show the examiner that you are able to identify the most important information from the graph.

reaching 57,3%. - without "at"

slight changes in the elderly - remove the "a" and add "the"

accounting for 61,6% - not account to

forecasted to drop to 46,2%

Overall, everything looks good, except for the Overview.