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AmbigaY

Dec 7, 2016

Undergraduate / Recount a time when something really made you laugh. Smith and Colgate University supplemental [3]

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Smith College- We know that colleges ask a lot of hard questions on their applications. This one is not so hard and we promise, there is no hidden agenda - just have fun! We have all heard the saying "laughter is the best medicine." Recount a time when something really made you laugh. (200 word limit)

After a couple of glasses of whisky, grandpa was drunk, and he was surely not in a state to attend the after-dinner show. Minutes later, everyone agreed that he should be going get some rest, and as usual, I was the one to drop him by his room. Just out of the restaurant, I made the terrible mistake of letting go off his hands. While I was trying to tie my shoe laces, instead of waiting for me, grandpa, despite his poor vision and the fact that it was dark outside, continued to walk. And suddenly, "BLOOP! PLOSHHH! ", there he went, unexpectedly stepping, and diving headfirst into the fish pond and he soon started to flail all the way through, while screaming for help. Everyone from the outdoor restaurant had stood up to see what was happening and few others and I, were rushing to help him. Eventually, he was successfully pulled out, but his brand new suit was ruined by the muddy water, his glasses were still nowhere to be found and I couldn't stop laughing at him. The following day, we came across so many people who cautiously advised grandpa to stay away from the fish pond.

Is it really funny, can u guys help me make it more funny pls?

I wanted to change the conclusion by showing how I can bring holi to colgate. can u guys help me with building the conclusion? Any request warmly welcomed pls

With anticipated thanks

AmbigaY

Dec 6, 2016

Writing Feedback / Reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship [6]

Its a great essay. Just a few mistakes to correct,

In a contemporary globalization era..., the majority of people have become accustomed....,

instead of caused numerous problems, use- gave rise to numerous problems/issues,

not because my opinion: to my opinion,

check out, commas missing

AmbigaY

Dec 6, 2016

Undergraduate / I come from a family of chefs- MIT essay [8]

Merged:MIT essay- Can someone check content and give advice

Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your passions and dreams? 250-300 words

At my grandparents street food stall, as a child, I spent my summer holidays watching Grandma Diva, sitting by a blazing pan of bubbling oil, while the aromas of the succulent vegetable fritters wafted through the air. Since then, I begun spending my free time in the kitchen, experimenting with all sorts of ingredients and utensils all while tweaking colors, flavors and textures or trying to mingle my Mauritian culture into fusion recipes. My parents have always encouraged me to pursue what I love. They noticed my interest in cooking and bought me several sets of cookbooks such as 'Thuričs Gastronomie' and 'Délices De France' which pushed me deeper into mesmerizing culinary world. As I began exploring with inquisitive eyes the infinite combinations of ingredients awaiting to be plated, my mind had become an adept to the language of food. Outside the kitchen, I treasured my passion, always seeking for new ways to bring it into life. At the age of thirteen, I begun going to the market all by myself to shop my own ingredient, and on every special occasions, I would grab the opportunity to organize a family dinner. On New Year's Eve, I would spend hours, slicing scallop into Carpaccio, grilling lobster in brown butter and peeking into the oven to admire the sizzling lamb shoulder and the golden potatoes. Growing up in a family lineage of street food vendors and being in environment surrounded by chefs has instilled in me the desire of myself becoming a great cook and though the hard work ethic my life experiences have instilled in me, I strive everyday to fulfill my dreams of making a culinary voyage all across the world and opening my own restaurant to make people happy with my food and struggle for a Michelin Star.