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Name: Tan Jia Le
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School: Foon Yew High School

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jiale1029   
Jan 6, 2017
Undergraduate / Innovation and Seeking the Truth [7]

@Holt

So the main problem in my essay is that I didn't discuss about my belief personally and what I should do currently is to refer some of the examples given and further elaborate them as well as including some examples in my life?
jiale1029   
Jan 4, 2017
Undergraduate / Innovation and Seeking the Truth [7]

Hello @Holt
Is it better if I relate my own target in the essay rather than talking about academic stuff?
Can you list some examples for personal beliefs?
Thank you!

Hello @blueknightiris
Thank you for the corrections on the grammar, it will be good if you can share some of your resources with me, thx!
jiale1029   
Jan 3, 2017
Undergraduate / Innovation and Seeking the Truth [7]

"Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions."

I have hope for the right values in NTU



We human being tends to think out of the box despite of the impossible odds that may be ahead of us. Some may think that being imaginative are the same as being innovative, however in reality, they are not the same, not at all. The belief that I hold strongly is that one must be innovative in their life. Innovation is what pushes mankind forward and it plays an important role in our lives. I was the leader of the committee for the School Innovation Competition. In the competition, I found out that innovation can be anywhere and anytime and regardless of the person's age. As a matter of fact, there was a real example that I have seen before. A student that is 13 years old at the time is able to create a model of a drainage system that is targeted to further improve our lives. Since then, being innovative is a part of my life and I try hard to embrace it.

On the other hand, seeking truth is a value that everyone tries to adhere in their daily lives. That is the same for me, as a science stream student, I always hope to satisfy my own curiosity. It may seem weird but that is who I am. I love asking question during the process of pursuing truth, the discomfort caused by confusion bothers me and I wish to obtain answer through asking the question.

Hence, I hope that the above values are able to represent who am I and my hope towards the future. Studying in NTU is able to help me to be more innovative and also seek the truth and thus I hope that I am able to obtain the scholarship to reduce my parents' burden.

Pls provide some advice for the essay for further improvement! Thanks!
jiale1029   
Jan 3, 2017
Undergraduate / I believe that diligence and hard-working is vital. [5]

Hi desin, IMO there isn't a connection between the points listed in your essay. In addition, it is better if you are able to focus on maybe 3 values instead or 4 as you can include some examples for the values. The organisation of the essay is mediocre and by decreasing the number of values, I think your essay will be better. Also, I think that you can write something like you deserved the scholarship for reasons.