Writing Feedback / Fastfood is good or bad for our lives? [5]

Hi, There are few mistakes in sentence formation and using of right verb .l have corrected few to show the difference.


Rewritten it
Nowadays, with the development of an economy, people have changed their lifestyle compared to the past. One of the changes is fast food consumption, which has become popular with every country. Although it is cheap and convenient for people that do not have enough time to cook, but continuous consumption of it increased the risk of many dreadful diseases.

First of all, these days, we can easy to find fast food stores everywhere, rephrase sentence

It's the best way to eat the meal which saves time [corrected verb]

However, eating fast food regularly has harmful for health because it contains a great deal of fat. [corrected]

Scholarship / Life is like riding a bicycle. Check for me this Letter of Introduce [5]

@Minh Minh
It is not easily understandable and there are a lot of repetitions of words, incorrect use of proposition and spelling mistake.

That are main seasons = That is main reason
the tender passion of research

It helped me possesses a general vision ...

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TEENAGE YEARS OR ADULT YEARS ARE MORE HAPPY ? [7]

there are few spelling mistakes and sentences with better words. I have listed few of them
responbility = responsibilities

struggle in all kinds = struggle with all kinds

who betrayed them= that betray them

acquaitances=acquaintances

passive voice is used instead of active voice.

Letters / Planning to meet a stranger and asking him his interests. [3]

@Holt
Thanks, Holt. Yes, putting the question mark is always an issue for me. I know we can still ask the question without question mark. So I need to work on that.Also, you rightly mentioned I need to work on plural rules and yes the connecting words as well.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays overpopulation and crowding of large cities are considered a big problem in the world. [5]


I correct how much I can. There were spelling mistakes.Also some places you can use synonyms.

Additionally .You haven't disagreed anywhere on the paragraph. You have to put another side as well.I believe you have to present both views first and in conclusion your views on it.

correction of spelling mistake and verbs and few synonyms. I have scored 6 in writing and also finding ways to increase to 7 and I found this site useful.

... In fact, to get a space in the city.
reasons closely linked to this issue...

Before explaining my suggestion, l propose a wider range of opinion on the subject matter.

... and having the livelihood in the big cities.
... thought of a solution needed to deal with as so many ...

... needs a greater degree of help from the government.
... for the dwellers, it is very beneficial to solve the housing shortcoming. As well as transfer student halls, factories, ...

In addition, increasing the rent by the house owners should be regulated.

Grammar, Usage / When I was small, I have covered many wonderful places in India. Need correction and better words [3]

@Holt
Thanks! and it is amazing how you choose the words to convey the same information.