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Posts by haleshi
Name: haleshi
Joined: Feb 16, 2017
Last Post: Feb 16, 2017
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From: ind
School: IELTS

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haleshi   
Feb 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - Travelling to other countries with appreciation for different customs [4]

@Abrahamlincoln

In the conclusion, the sentence seems very complicated. It is good to use complex sentences without hampering the meaning.
We can re write the conclusion by splitting into two sentence.

... cultures in order to make them comfortable. This eventually result in increasing the potential of their tourism sector.
haleshi   
Feb 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - how many people took computer science at university of UK? [4]

Hi Abrahamlincoln,

It is important to give more stress on sentence structure. For example,

Meanwhile, in the male group, there was almost approximately 20

We can use other words to talk about trends, such as, dramatic, sudden, sharp, substantial etc

Hope it helps
haleshi   
Feb 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Modern building versus buildings from the past [3]

In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar Why is it the case? Is it a good thing or bad thing?

Modern and alike



In the olden days, the outlook of building depicted the cultural heritage in comparison with the modern buildings which almost look similar to each other, that in turn makes the city look alike. This trend could be ascribed to the scarcity of land for construction of buildings. In my opinion, having buildings which symbolises the culture has enormous advantages in terms of maintaining cultural divergence and tourism.

There are evident reasons as to why the houses in Metropolitan cities resemble one another. First and foremost, the population has skyrocketed which resulted in the scarcity of land for construction of houses. Due to increase in pollution many people have migrated from suburbs to urban areas. Thus, cities are overpopulated leaving very less space for construction of houses. Due to this, the concept of an apartment is vital in almost all cities wherein all buildings are constructed with the same plan which is an exact copy of each other. Bangalore is the prime example which is already hosting more people than it can accommodate, which led to the construction of buildings which are alike.

Nevertheless, the rise of the apartment is not all that beneficial. This is because the buildings show the culture and history of our religion. For example, Muslims while constructing home include one dome at the top. Therefore, it clearly reveals the religion which has been followed by the people if we look at the buildings. Furthermore, tourists have a great deal of interest in viewing the different type of buildings when they visit places of interest rather than viewing the same kind of building everywhere.

All in all, the modern buildings around the globe resembles each other in contrast with the buildings from earlier decades which were differently built. In conclusion, the construction of the buildings with the same pattern will result in losing cultural divergence which has been followed from ages around the world.
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