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bilal_engineer

Apr 30, 2017

Scholarship / Study Objectives Essay For Fulbright Scholarship Program 2018 From Pakistan [4]

@Monica26

Dear Monica,

Thanks so much for taking time out to read my essay it means a lot. Following are some of my questions:-

1. Do you think I should begin introducing what I studied in my undergrad, my bachelor's university's ranking and some of the courses which I studied then carry on?

2. What exactly should be the main idea? Because in my first paragraph I've told that what problem does engineers face while they work in projects.

3. Thirdly you said that I haven't explained the programs I want to study in detail, I've categorically mentioned that I want to pursue Engineering Management, you think I should emphasize on it a bit more?

It is honestly very confusing, the scholarship deadline is 17th may and I've to prepare for my GRE as well :(

I'll check your essay too and give my feedback.

Any more insight which you can give I will be very thankful, also can you notice some grammatical mistakes? Let me know

Regards,
Bilal

bilal_engineer

Apr 30, 2017

Scholarship / STATEMENT OF PURPOSE FOR OFID SCHOLARSHIP AWARD - PAKISTAN RISK [4]

@Farmancus
Dear Farman,

In my opinion you are making big problems in your goals section, you don't sound focused at all. For instance you want to get a Master's degree in Disaster Management , okay that's good now tell why you need it, what affect will that have in your life and in your learning keeping in view of the fact that you already have a bachelor's degree in the same course.

Then why will be a research fellow? being a research fellow is no walk in the park, you have to be dedicated to the position, to the topic of research you are conducting and also show commitment to the university and your in-line lead professor.

Similarly, your four goals don't connect with each other which doesn't give a picture of your future life, you should be sure of what you want to do, your goal shouldn't be to get an international degree rather it should be to do something for Pakistan as a developing nation and how will this degree prove to be help to you in making that goal a reality got it?

Your whole essay doesn't look organized to me at all so you have to work on it my friend. I'm no expert but giving you my honest opinion.

Regards,
Bilal

bilal_engineer

Apr 30, 2017

Scholarship / The road to abolish energy poverty from my country [4]

@azadsaleem71

Dear Azad,
Salam buddy!

I've proofread your essay and following is some of the parts which I would cut and edited mistakes in bold:-

~~As a child I always fantasized [....] I choose mechanical engineering.~~
Instead of writing this tell the committee what you are doing now and how that connects with your field of study.

~~Since I have opened up my eyes,~~ I have seen Pakistan crushed in the hands ...
... Pakistan has impeded the development of long-term and ...
... effects of energy poverty extend to every aspect ...

... inclination towards innovation have invigorated the ambitions ...
... and develop small-scale energy solutions on a regional level suited to ...
... work on are efficient biogas plants for my ...

... distinguished faculty in a high-techresearch facility ...

The university of South Florida is my top ...
Hailing from a middle-class family and ...

While writing this essay, sitting on my table, (...) a fan with a temperature above 45°C ...
... me from my goals but instead, have filled me ...

I also want to tell that I cannot get the act of the essay, it is not organized in my opinion. What you can do is following:-

Tell about your current job/situation, connect it with the field of study, tell why this field is so important keeping the problems faced by pakistan in parallel, tell how the completion of this program would help you help Pakistan, don't be vague be sound in what you want to do, mention your goals or some sort of a postition which you are looking after and then end it how crucial will that position on your return will be for Pakistan.

I am not an expert myself but I'm preparing for Fulbright and have known some things. Best of luck

bilal_engineer

Apr 30, 2017

Scholarship / Study Objectives Essay For Fulbright Scholarship Program 2018 From Pakistan [4]

Dear members,
Greetings From Pakistan!
I hope all of you are doing fine and life is good. I just got done with my study objectives for the Fulbright scholarship, I will be really thankful if you can take a look at it. The instructions on the application are:

My educational plans

Currently working as a Resident Engineer for Pakistan's largest educational development project termed as "Smart University & Safe Campus" which has been funded by Higher Education Commission Of Pakistan in which more than 100 public sector universities will be connected via blanket Wi-Fi coverage and IP surveillance solution in order to counter any future terrorist activity. In my opinion, the technological and engineering expertise can only be converted into corporate success if they are augmented by strong managerial skill and a sharp insight. Pakistan does not have a scarcity of talented individuals who can instantly provide innovative solutions to the demands and challenges faced by the state as a developing nation; instead, it lacks individuals who are proficient, above their technical prowess, in the production and management aspects of bringing their novel ideas to practical implementation. The educational opportunities provided by the United States have no match in quality and quantity. These powerful institutions are the central processing unit of America's power in the world today and I want to take the full advantage out of it.

Therefore, I intend to put across my interests in studying an effective Master degree program in Engineering Management in the United States of America under the prestigious Fulbright Scholarship. The strongest weapon of United States is not only its highly trained soldiers and naval army but also the power of its higher educational institutes which in turn produces top-notch graduates who have an open, energetic and intellectual mind.

The most important aspect of the strong economy of a state is its innovation, especially today when technology is seen as so wanted and appreciated. Engineering Management is critical to innovation as its the basic application of technology to solve business problems and also of project management and skills management to accomplish complex projects, therefore, a degree under the program of Engineering Management would complement an entire state like Pakistan.

The application of engineering has to prove robust results. Many political projects have undertaken sound good but do not produce well off results in practice. For example, the failure of 'Nandipur power project' is the latest case in line with several others which are an open testament to the above-mentioned facts. Four years and around Rs. 84 billion were wasted on this project which was hoped to add 425 MW to the national grid. The project has produced nothing so far. Engineering results are objective. And this is the century of applying engineering techniques and managing them proficiently.

In due course of this qualification, the primary objective that I wish to achieve is to gain practical skills at all phases of planning, managing, producing and successfully launching a commercially viable engineering solution. I would be highly interested in learning, in detail, about the different tools and techniques employed by industrial players to organize marketing campaigns, to assure customer satisfaction, in dealing with legal issues and to come up with technically specific designs. This degree will further polish my skills at a professional level and will teach me how companies function and how they manage large scale projects. The opportunity to analyze industrial operations on a research project and assignment level will enhance my real life analytical skills and technical writing capabilities. All of these activities will provide me with plenty of successful examples of how projects are handled and directed to successful fruition in the engineering industry. The international exposure and the cutting-edge facilities at the university will also be very useful for me in the future.

Upon the completion of MS Engineering Management, I have an immediate interest to return back to my current company as a Project Manager in the level-II of the project of "Smart University & Safe Campus" where the same infrastructure would be installed in private sector universities of Pakistan. HEC is also planning for "Pakistan Education & Research Network 3" (PERN-3) in which 50 universities will be connected with 10G fiber optics pipeline along with China-Pakistan & Economic Corridor (CPEC) fiber which will start from China and end in Pakistan.

In the long run, I would like to be able to hold a position of power where I can independently meet with stakeholders, researchers and government officials to devise and manage mega projects undertaken to address the higher needs of the Pakistani society. I would want to ideally be in charge of the IT industry of Pakistan and work with energetic engineers to provide diligent IT solutions to national problems such as terrorism, illiteracy, cybercrime, logistics, disaster management and digitization of national institutions. Therefore, this program is best suited to further my skills on the application level.