daxXx_ryan31
May 11, 2017
Writing Feedback / Punishment on educating children [3]
Hello mail257, thanks for your feedback on my essay.
With regard to yours, I believe you have good insights and arguments within the essay. However, I think you should pay additional attention to grammar.
Here are some of the suggestions and corrections of mine:
1. Aside from the various effective methods
2. can only make children fear and oppose
3. full of fright and disappointment /or/ frightened and disappointed
4. Consequently,
5. the more difficult it is to educate him/them
6. As a result,
7. he is not satisfied.
Best of luck!
Hello mail257, thanks for your feedback on my essay.
With regard to yours, I believe you have good insights and arguments within the essay. However, I think you should pay additional attention to grammar.
Here are some of the suggestions and corrections of mine:
1. Aside from the various effective methods
2. can only make children fear and oppose
3. full of fright and disappointment /or/ frightened and disappointed
4. Consequently,
5. the more difficult it is to educate him/them
6. As a result,
7. he is not satisfied.
Best of luck!