Writing Feedback / OPINION ABOUT SHOPPING ONLINE [4]

Hi everyone, this is my practice of writing an opinion paragraph. Hope you can help me make it better. Thank you

Writing a paragraph to clarify your opinion about shopping online. Do you think its benefits will overweight its risks? You should write about 150 words.

shopping online is a great solution for promoting economic

I am in favour of the idea that shopping online brings numerous facilities not only for sellers but also for customers. With the increasingly fast development of the Internet, social medias and websites such as Facebook, Twitter or Instagram, shopping online becomes easier than ever. First, because everything is selling online so sellers do not need to rent or buy any place for setting up and decorating a shop. They just need to photograph their products and post those pictures to social websites with an attractive caption. In addition, advertisements may be not required, when their customers are satisfied with their goods, they will share and write good reviews. Second, buyers can search and choose anything they want just by clicking and scrolling their mouses. All information of the product includes size, color, material and more are described in its product introduction with attached pictures. Finally, in my point of view, shopping online reduces unnecessarily intermediate steps and is the base of strong e-commerce. To sum up, for these reasons, it seems to me that shopping online in right way is a great solution for promoting economic.

Writing Feedback / Children are increasingly spending less time to their parents. [4]

Technology affects relation between members of family

Nowadays, many problems are caused by that children tend to spend less time with their parents.Firstly, they have trouble with showing opinion and controlling behavior. With children, mom and dad are the most familiar people, so they will be really lonely and upset if their parents don't have enough time to them. It is reason why they try to attract attention from other with undesirable behaviors.Secondly, it is much more dangerous if children are lured to commit crimes. Because they can not distinguish between wrong and right, so they don't know the consequences of their actions. In fact, many children in the world are used as tools for cheating and stoling. In sumary, children need to be listened and cared from parents. Please! don't leave they alone.