Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 - Water used in different countries in 2000. [5]

the total use of water in some world places

The charts below give information about the way in which water used in different countries in 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two graphs show data on world water use, and the four nations which used it on year 2000 to three different purposes. Overall, the highest water consumption was from agriculture while the lowest was for domestic used.

The amount of the water used in agricultural purpose around the world on 2000 was at 70 %, in china the percentage was slightly low at 69 % and in india was at 92 %, and the amount of water used to domestic and industry only at 5 and 3 percent. However, in canada the highest use of water was from the industry in around 80 % and the water consumption for agricultural only at 8 percent, the case was almost similiar with the new zealand, while the water for agriculture not the biggest percentage because domestic used was 2 % high was about 46 % compared to 44 % for agricultural and 10 percent for industrial purpose.

It also can be clearly seen the total use of water use in china on agricultural and domestic used was almost identically with the total of water consumption in the world with only one percent different on both categories, the china only share the same amount with the world in term of water use for industry.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2 - Relationship between young and old generation [2]

gap of communication between generations

Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. Why is this the case ? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In this vast growing world, the adult people look like more strength and influence than young generations in the past. I will discuss the case and the effect on relationship between young adult and elder people.

In a different parts of the world, the people who are born in this so called modern era are more likely to know many things faster than the people who born in a few decades ago, due to the fact that right now there are so many technologies which can provide information and data, or many devices which can help their everday life. In this case for example, at very young age, children when they want to play, are often been introduced to a gadget like a phone tablet, which is just after few times using that device, then they are be able to use them properly. Furthermore in another case,there is a 5 yrs old child is often search some explanation on the internet if he see or hear something from his parent, that will make them having more knowledge than a child on the few decades ago.

The children who grow up with that often show more power and knowledge when they talk, the impact are when they face a situation which they have to confronted elderly people. When they use many popular languages when talk, the old people who may not understand to this new develop language often get some confusion and may lead to missunderstanding.

In conclusion, if this kind of situation will continue, there might be some long connection gap of communication between young and old generation in the future.

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