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Elizabeth0606

Aug 25, 2017

Writing Feedback / [writing task 2]The best way for children to read books. [4]

You should use some words such as aren't, let's in an academic essay.
"books are very important to people" can be replaced by "books play an important role in learning". "play an important role" is good collocation. If you use more collocations for each topic, you can get higher band score.

"very good" can be replaced by "essential". you should use academic words. Remember this.
Why when you write books, "educational system" is mentioned here. It is not appropriate. You can replace it with "reference books".
"but has some negative effects": "but it has some negative effects" or "but it can cause some detrimental impacts"(good paraphrase for negative effects).

When you give an idea, it is essential to have an example of explanation, it will make your essay have more convince (my teacher said that).

(Good luck)

Elizabeth0606

Aug 24, 2017

Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing Task 2] The best solution for traffic jam is providing free public transport? [3]

Question:

The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport for 24 hours per day, and seven days a week.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

more feasible solutions necessary

It is sometimes argued that the best solution to traffic problem is to traffic problem is to provide a free public transport system all the time. While I accept that may suit with many people, I believe that government should give more feasible solutions to address this problem.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why helping people easily access to public transports without paying the fee is beneficial in some ways. The first reason is that the using of bus and trains would help to ease traffic flow. If the government issues free bus and train passes for citizens in their countries, the demand for using private vehicles will be less serve as bus and metros are highly accessible. Another convincing reason worth mentioning is that using free public transports can help people avoid traffic jams in rush hour. For example, if employees and students chose to drive their car to go home, the traffic would be worsen that waste them a lot of time on the roads.

On the other hand, governments should consider providing more possible solutions to tackle traffic congestion. Firstly, it would be costly to provide a free public transport system for everyone while other important sectors, such as education and health care, need to be funded. This is evidence to support the idea that providing a public transport for citizens is not the best solution to solve traffic problems. Secondly, the number of passengers is very small at some certain time of a day, especially when it comes to the period from midnight to early morning. This may result in wasting of a lot of things such as fuel.

In conclusion, it is certainly true that proving people free public transportations play an important role in tackling traffic jam, but this is by no means the key consideration for government in solving this problem.