Undergraduate / Just for fun at the beginning. Rice University Supplemental Essay. Am I being too honest? [4]

Don't emphasize that Rice is the ideal match for show. In my honest opinion, show us rather than tell us.

Its engineering ranking and overall curriculum and activities is what primarily caught my attention by the end. - why don't you use caught me eye, rather than caught my attention by the end.

we decided that it would be "fun" to look up "Most Beautiful ... - Don't include that, I'm sure they are aware where they rank in college beauty. Don't put rankings in your essay.

Hope I was of good and useful help.

Essays / Yale Young African scholars Essay Prompts 2018 - looking for hints [3]

@Holt, could the essay on what I find fascinating be on a concept like history, Medicine even Math?

Undergraduate / Storyteller. MIT Admission Essay - Something you do for the pleasure of it. [5]

I acctually thought you were a storyteller that narrates stories to kids, 😂. In my honest opinion, I think you should make 'storyteller' your title and 'I love doing it for fun' the hook of the essay, let it be a paragraph on its own, to make the reader crave for more, then everything else follows. Then maybe as your last sentence of the paragraph, say, I go, constantly searching the landscape for a new narrative, with a new story in each.

Undergraduate / Child Abuse: How "Wolf Children" Changed my Worldview (Commonapp) [4]

This essay should fit he prompt - Creative work/art/fictional character that has had an influence on you. In my honest opinion, you shoul pick a character that you have something in common or you like and base your essay on that one character. You don't want your essay to be all over the place by writing about the whole film. Depth is by far better than length, be deep about that on character than spreading your whole essay on the whole film and having little or no to write. You are writing an essay, not a movie review.

Undergraduate / The Common App Essay - Topic 2 - Failure and experience for the future [6]

I think you can use the beginning of the second paragraph
'The class went silent' as a hook for your essay (I.e, making it the first sentence of your essay).
Then the first paragraph as of now should be the second- switch the first and second and see how it turns out.

Essays / Yale Young African Scholars Essay [3]

Thank you @Holt. The prompts are:

1. We would like to know the context in which you grew up. Describe the factors that influence your academic achievements. (500 max).

2. Explain the values most important to you (200 max)

3. Why do you want to be a YYAS scholar. (200 max)

4. Each YYAS scholar benefits from the program, what would you contribute to YYAS program (100 words)

I would like to get guidelines like you did with @Madonna104.
Thank you.