dangtam
Jan 22, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS: student's basic curriculum - with or without art? [5]
... worthwhile to teaching children ...
a ubiquitousa variety of
... worthwhile to teaching children ...
a ubiquitous
dangtam
Jan 20, 2018
Writing Feedback / Changes of the propotion of population aged 65 and over [2]
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of residents whose age are 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.
As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that the aged population of three countries is expected to increase over the course of 100 years, starting from 1940.
In 1940, the rate of elderly American registered the highest among the three, standing at around 8%. This proportion continued to grow to 15% in 1980, before reaching its predicted peak at nearly 25% in 2040. Besides, Sweden also experienced the same trend between 1940 and 1980. However, the percentage of elderly Swedish is forecasted to some fluctuations over the next 60 years, before a soar to 25%. On the other hand, the ratio of 65-and-over citizens in Japan experienced a downward trend in the initial 20 years and then remained unchanged at approximately 4% in the following 30 years. After that, there will be a gradual growth to 10% in the next 4 decades, before soaring by more than 15% at the end of the time frame.
(184 words)
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of residents whose age are 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.
As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that the aged population of three countries is expected to increase over the course of 100 years, starting from 1940.
In 1940, the rate of elderly American registered the highest among the three, standing at around 8%. This proportion continued to grow to 15% in 1980, before reaching its predicted peak at nearly 25% in 2040. Besides, Sweden also experienced the same trend between 1940 and 1980. However, the percentage of elderly Swedish is forecasted to some fluctuations over the next 60 years, before a soar to 25%. On the other hand, the ratio of 65-and-over citizens in Japan experienced a downward trend in the initial 20 years and then remained unchanged at approximately 4% in the following 30 years. After that, there will be a gradual growth to 10% in the next 4 decades, before soaring by more than 15% at the end of the time frame.
(184 words)
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
elderly residents in Japan, Sweden, and the USA
The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of residents whose age are 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.
As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that the aged population of three countries is expected to increase over the course of 100 years, starting from 1940.
In 1940, the rate of elderly American registered the highest among the three, standing at around 8%. This proportion continued to grow to 15% in 1980, before reaching its predicted peak at nearly 25% in 2040. Besides, Sweden also experienced the same trend between 1940 and 1980. However, the percentage of elderly Swedish is forecasted to some fluctuations over the next 60 years, before a soar to 25%. On the other hand, the ratio of 65-and-over citizens in Japan experienced a downward trend in the initial 20 years and then remained unchanged at approximately 4% in the following 30 years. After that, there will be a gradual growth to 10% in the next 4 decades, before soaring by more than 15% at the end of the time frame.
(184 words)
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of residents whose age are 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.
As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that the aged population of three countries is expected to increase over the course of 100 years, starting from 1940.
In 1940, the rate of elderly American registered the highest among the three, standing at around 8%. This proportion continued to grow to 15% in 1980, before reaching its predicted peak at nearly 25% in 2040. Besides, Sweden also experienced the same trend between 1940 and 1980. However, the percentage of elderly Swedish is forecasted to some fluctuations over the next 60 years, before a soar to 25%. On the other hand, the ratio of 65-and-over citizens in Japan experienced a downward trend in the initial 20 years and then remained unchanged at approximately 4% in the following 30 years. After that, there will be a gradual growth to 10% in the next 4 decades, before soaring by more than 15% at the end of the time frame.
(184 words)
dangtam
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / ILETS Task Line graph: Precantage of workers with Illness Absence [6]
I think it is your first time to write an essay about IELTS task 1 right? From my point of view, the first thing you should do is to follow the general outline of task 1, which includes the introduction (paraphrase), an overview statement (the trend of each line, increase in Netherlands and Sweden, decrease in France and no change in the UK and Germany), body 1, body 2. There is no need to write the conclusion, just write your conclusion if you find that all those things you just wrote don't meet requirements of enough words.
I think it is your first time to write an essay about IELTS task 1 right? From my point of view, the first thing you should do is to follow the general outline of task 1, which includes the introduction (paraphrase), an overview statement (the trend of each line, increase in Netherlands and Sweden, decrease in France and no change in the UK and Germany), body 1, body 2. There is no need to write the conclusion, just write your conclusion if you find that all those things you just wrote don't meet requirements of enough words.
dangtam
Nov 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Sport is reducing international controversies and leads citizens to express their patriotism [2]
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
That numerous tournaments held globally all year round is crucial in reducing international controversies and enhancing citizens to express their love for their nations securely. From my perspective, I completely agree with this idea.
To commence with, one of the benefits that annual championships have is their profound impacts on easing disputes among countries. There are various worldwide commercial negotiations taking place every day and some leads to conflicts when two sides cannot reach an agreement. To resolve these political and economic issues, intercontinental tournaments are constantly held to boost globalization. World Cup is a justification for that. Not only does the host country can obtain opportunities to propagate its tourism and inhabitants, it is given a chance as the place of friendship and solidarity among nations. Briefly, seeing that the connection that every sporting competition can bring to us, peace remains.
On the other hand, it is obvious that universal competitions can stimulate each athlete to try their best to compete for the honor of the country they come from. When a contestant is put in the competition with a large number of contestants from all over the world, he or she will have a tendency to perform in his or her best progress so as to be stand out from the crowd. For instance, the last part of each match in every competition is the national honor ceremony which can be done by playing national anthem song of the winner and thousands of audiences and spectators will witness the winner's flag gradually hung up to the top. To conclude, international sporting occasions is the time for the contribution and recognition of each individual as well as each nation to the better world.
In conclusion, it is inevitable benefits that international tournaments can reduce conflicts among countries in every field. Besides, they are also the time for friendship and solidarity among individuals and nations.
(315 words)
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
a tournament instead of war
That numerous tournaments held globally all year round is crucial in reducing international controversies and enhancing citizens to express their love for their nations securely. From my perspective, I completely agree with this idea.
To commence with, one of the benefits that annual championships have is their profound impacts on easing disputes among countries. There are various worldwide commercial negotiations taking place every day and some leads to conflicts when two sides cannot reach an agreement. To resolve these political and economic issues, intercontinental tournaments are constantly held to boost globalization. World Cup is a justification for that. Not only does the host country can obtain opportunities to propagate its tourism and inhabitants, it is given a chance as the place of friendship and solidarity among nations. Briefly, seeing that the connection that every sporting competition can bring to us, peace remains.
On the other hand, it is obvious that universal competitions can stimulate each athlete to try their best to compete for the honor of the country they come from. When a contestant is put in the competition with a large number of contestants from all over the world, he or she will have a tendency to perform in his or her best progress so as to be stand out from the crowd. For instance, the last part of each match in every competition is the national honor ceremony which can be done by playing national anthem song of the winner and thousands of audiences and spectators will witness the winner's flag gradually hung up to the top. To conclude, international sporting occasions is the time for the contribution and recognition of each individual as well as each nation to the better world.
In conclusion, it is inevitable benefits that international tournaments can reduce conflicts among countries in every field. Besides, they are also the time for friendship and solidarity among individuals and nations.
(315 words)
