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milk

Feb 3, 2018

Undergraduate / Choose one of the communities to which you belong, describe that community and your place within it [3]

Like Holt said, your initial question of "why the hell am I here" wasn't actually answered by the rest of your essay. The first paragraph as a whole doesn't add much outside of vague metaphors, and could honestly be removed entirely without much of an impact on the rest of the essay. I would recommend doing that and instead elaborating more on your "place within" your community. You've described the gym and how it makes you feel quite extensively, but as to your role within the gym all that you've really said is that you are a spotter and that you've made friends there.

Also, you use contractions several times throughout your essay, which you should avoid to keep the writing formal

milk

Feb 3, 2018

Undergraduate / Waterloo AIF - Goals and interests in the Global Business and Digital Arts [3]

Any editing help is appreciated.

aims of study and why GBDA

Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900 character limit)

My ultimate educational goal is to attend law school and become a certified attorney, though I believe a good undergraduate program is essential in building a solid foundation for any future endeavors. The School of Planning would allow me to utilize critical thinking skills to solve a variety of problems in unique ways, similarly to how one would in the law profession. It has also always been a dream of mine to work in digital media, particularly video. The chance GBDA provides to do not only just that, but to also apply those skills in a business context is an amazing opportunity. I have applied to Waterloo primarily due to the plethora of work experience opportunities that the school offers for my chosen fields. Companies nowadays value actual work experience above all else, and the extensive tools WaterlooWorks provides in this regard is simply unmatched by any other school.

Briefly explain why you are interested in the Global Business and Digital Arts
program. Comment, for example, on your interests and abilities; your career goals; exposure to digital media through school-related and other experiences; and discussions you have had with teachers, current or past Waterloo students. (900 character limit).

Ever since I watched my first film, the unique ways digital media is able to convey messages, feelings, and even emotion has fascinated me. Throughout my life I have striven to replicate such experiences in my own work, with video production, photography, and graphic design all having developed into great passions of mine. Having friends also interested in media pushed me even further down this path, and growing up with cousins in similar fields no doubt played a role in this as well (one studies animation, another studies CS at Waterloo). However, there has always been something preventing me from following fully in their footsteps- job security, and the questionable applicability of media-focused studies in a business-centric world. GBDA is the solution that I have been looking for- a program that allows me to connect my passions with the business skills to survive in today's society.