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Tamia

Mar 12, 2018

Writing Feedback / Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets. [4]

@Oscar Tam
Thank you for your advice. It has a good point in your idea that I haven't thought of.

@Holt Thank you for your detailed comment. Can you explain further about the part that my essay seem not to have complete sentences please? I don't understand that much. Do you have any advice for me to fix thí problem?

Tamia

Mar 2, 2018

Writing Feedback / Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat? Do you agree or disagree [5]

Hello,

So some grammatical mistakes have been shown above so I won't repeat them again.

Ur way of developing ideas still causes some confuse to me. Maybe it is the lack of linking words and unsuitable words in some cases. Namely, it should be avoid them not ~~cannot escape~~ , Exercising which serves as an effective way to get rid of those excessive calories ~~which~~ makes no difference in this special family-gene circumstance,....

Also, genetics is not the main cause of obesity in young generation. There are other factors such as diets, exercise regime, food, pampering children,..
In this essay, if you oppose the given statement, I recommend you should prove why parents who pamper their off-springs, which leads to their overweight should not be put in jail. You should prove that this action of parents is not deserved to be punished so severely. Instead, they should be given advice and re- educated about how to raise their kids in a proper way

Tamia

Mar 2, 2018

Writing Feedback / Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets. [4]

Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets. What do you think are the reasons and what do you think about this?

more imported food, less local cuisine?

With the multicultural integration, foreign cuisine takes an essential role in contributing to the diversity of that of one nation. It is inevitable that there will be a tendency of home- country food losing common preference due to the appearance of other new diets.

Initially, this trend is accelerating in the result of the alteration of residents' appetites. Conventional food has been attached to the history and culture - factors that define the character of a society - since the early age. More or less, it is getting mundane to have these dishes on frequent occasions, esp. national holiday,.. so revolutionary diets are in need no matter what. At the same time, new diets with an innovative style of cooking and absolute time - saving capture all appetites immediately. This dietary with flavourful taste is undoubtedly more preferable than complex traditional ones.

As a matter of fact, imported cuisine from the outsiders enhances the variety of food culture of a continent. However, if people adopt these renovations without embracing the original cuisine of their country, it will rapidly sink into oblivion. Besides, foreign diets also introduce fast food which accounts for obesity and other severe diseases if being misused. Nowadays, according to its convenience and tasty flavor, junk food satisfies many people from the young to the adults, from students to workers who have irregular working hours.

In a nutshell, imported food has its benefits and it is people that decide if conventional dishes are forgotten or not. People have to learn how to balance their diets between two types of food consumption, adore the beauty of other nations' cuisine and maintain the long-term value of conventional food.