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Name: Abdallah Alnajjar
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Apr 2, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS ONE - The percentage of Australian's citizen did some activities [4]

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between 15 to 24, the men was started with 52,8% ... (( the *age group* between 15 to 24, the percentage of men who did regular physical activity was 52.8% while women's percentage was only 47.7%. On the other hand, surprisingly the other age group has much different ratios, with women percentage exceeding men's .... )

I think you should elaborate your thoughts using more words, instead of shortening and summarizing the essay in an incomprehensible way.
anajjar   
Apr 2, 2018
Writing Feedback / Success is a matter of luck - Essay [3]

"The harder you work, the luckier you get"



As the saying goes, "The harder you work, the luckier you get". Surprisingly, many people believe that success is a matter of luck which is beyond someone's direct control! While I believe that success solely depends on someone's attitude and approach towards life.

In my opinion, no true success was ever attained without facing obstacles nor having challenges strong enough to tackle the person many times before reaching the desired goal. Behind every success is a determined person; a person who is not easily swayed away from his/her target, and is able to deal with whatever dealt through life. The attitude of solving issues, mitigating risks and capturing opportunities is a main ingredient in success's recipe. Adding some flavor of dedication, focus and hard work will definitely get you where you want to reach.

It is true that many great achievers had capitalized on certain opportunities that have taken them closer to their goals, it is true that there is always a sense of luck in each success story. But what people tend to forget, is how hard those achievers had worked in order to get to where they have reached; how hard they have worked in order to open the doors and bring in those opportunities.

What makes me more convinced of success's dependency on attitude and approach to life is the high number of people who were lucky enough to have better starting points, who were given an advantage by having better resources and opportunities to make a huge success story. But instead they have erroneously approached life and lost all the privilege they had, simply because they lacked the right attitude and have not worked by success rules.

In the end, success is always at our reach! All we have to do is truly want it, work hard to reach our goals and most importantly believe in what we do. If you have clear vision of where you want to be, and have the will to put all that it takes to get you there, then you are lucky enough to succeed.
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