phuonguyen479
Sep 2, 2018
Writing Feedback / Raising the number of sports activities - the most efficient solution to boost the public health? [4]
@Linh Dieu
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@Linh Dieu
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phuonguyen479
Aug 26, 2018
Writing Feedback / Raising the number of sports activities - the most efficient solution to boost the public health? [4]
SOME PEOPLE THiNK THAT INCREASING THE NUMBER OF SPORTS FACILITIES IS THE BEST WAY TO IMPROVE PUBLIC HEALTH, BUT OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT HAS LITTLE EFFECTS AND WE NEED OTHER MEASURE TO IMPROVE IT
In the modern age, raising the number of sports activities is believed to be the most efficient solution to boost the public health. However, I support that both the above method and other approaches should be combined.
On the one hand, the increasing number of sports facilities would bring particular positive effects on the wellness of the public. First of all, due to he faster pace of life and the heavier workloads, people hardly have any spare time left after working as well as studying, so it will better if there are more easy-to-reach sports facilities. Additionally, more some work-out is necessary for the public to have a better health.
On the other hand, the above solution is supposed to bring only a few position effects. First, increasing the number of sports facilities does not attract all kinds of people because some of them may have financial problems or they may also have no interest in these places. Most people think that they are able to keep fit at their home without going to the gyms. Moreover, these activities take a long time to take favorable influence and people cannot wait, particularly the people who would like to lose weight. Because of this busy life and the fast speed of living, they are not patient enough to keep going to the gym and they want to take effects immediately.
As well as, physical activities, there are other ways of tackling the problem. The first measure imposing taxes on food and alcohol companies which decrease the number of people taking in them. Moreover, schools and universities should have more extracurriculars not only to encourage their students to be more active but also help to improve the public's health.
To reduce the health issue, people need a combination of many methods to tackle it.
THANK YOU (^.^)
encouraging to physical exercises for better health
SOME PEOPLE THiNK THAT INCREASING THE NUMBER OF SPORTS FACILITIES IS THE BEST WAY TO IMPROVE PUBLIC HEALTH, BUT OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT HAS LITTLE EFFECTS AND WE NEED OTHER MEASURE TO IMPROVE IT
In the modern age, raising the number of sports activities is believed to be the most efficient solution to boost the public health. However, I support that both the above method and other approaches should be combined.
On the one hand, the increasing number of sports facilities would bring particular positive effects on the wellness of the public. First of all, due to he faster pace of life and the heavier workloads, people hardly have any spare time left after working as well as studying, so it will better if there are more easy-to-reach sports facilities. Additionally, more some work-out is necessary for the public to have a better health.
On the other hand, the above solution is supposed to bring only a few position effects. First, increasing the number of sports facilities does not attract all kinds of people because some of them may have financial problems or they may also have no interest in these places. Most people think that they are able to keep fit at their home without going to the gyms. Moreover, these activities take a long time to take favorable influence and people cannot wait, particularly the people who would like to lose weight. Because of this busy life and the fast speed of living, they are not patient enough to keep going to the gym and they want to take effects immediately.
As well as, physical activities, there are other ways of tackling the problem. The first measure imposing taxes on food and alcohol companies which decrease the number of people taking in them. Moreover, schools and universities should have more extracurriculars not only to encourage their students to be more active but also help to improve the public's health.
To reduce the health issue, people need a combination of many methods to tackle it.
THANK YOU (^.^)
phuonguyen479
Apr 22, 2018
Writing Feedback / Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1 [5]
Thank you.
if I supplement my essay may you continue correcting my other fault, please.
... rice-producing country in the given top ten.Turning to the fourth rice producer, Bangladesh made 28, 293 tons of rice more approximately 700 tons than Viet Nam (27,646 tons). In the end of the top ten rice-producing countries, Japan and Philippines produced ...
Thank you.
if I supplement my essay may you continue correcting my other fault, please.
... rice-producing country in the given top ten.Turning to the fourth rice producer, Bangladesh made 28, 293 tons of rice more approximately 700 tons than Viet Nam (27,646 tons). In the end of the top ten rice-producing countries, Japan and Philippines produced ...
phuonguyen479
Apr 22, 2018
Writing Feedback / Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1 [5]
thank you.
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phuonguyen479
Apr 21, 2018
Writing Feedback / Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1 [5]
The bar graph compares the data about the leading rice- productive counties in 1999.
In conclusion, China and India contributed to the total manufacture most whereas the USA produced the amount of rice roughly a twentieth as less as the figure of China in 1999.
To begin with, the two countries standing at the top position were China and India with 192,971 tons and 122,244 tons in turns. Those countries got the significant figures of rice produce compared to 46,100 tons of manufactured rice in Indonesia which were the second rice-producing country in the given top ten, Japan and Philippines produced the quantities of rice a half as less as Viet Nam and Thailand with 12,531 tons and 10,000 tons of rice respectively. Moreover, the country having the least number of rice production was the USA with 8,183 tons in the ten countries.
leading rice-productive counties in 1999
The bar graph compares the data about the leading rice- productive counties in 1999.
In conclusion, China and India contributed to the total manufacture most whereas the USA produced the amount of rice roughly a twentieth as less as the figure of China in 1999.
To begin with, the two countries standing at the top position were China and India with 192,971 tons and 122,244 tons in turns. Those countries got the significant figures of rice produce compared to 46,100 tons of manufactured rice in Indonesia which were the second rice-producing country in the given top ten, Japan and Philippines produced the quantities of rice a half as less as Viet Nam and Thailand with 12,531 tons and 10,000 tons of rice respectively. Moreover, the country having the least number of rice production was the USA with 8,183 tons in the ten countries.
