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Posts by Buivandat
Name: Bui Van Dat
Joined: May 29, 2018
Last Post: Jul 1, 2018
Threads: 2
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From: Việt Nam
School: Hanoi University of Pharmacy

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Buivandat   
Jul 1, 2018
Writing Feedback / iELTS WRITING TASK 2: Topic: In cities, large shopping center and supermarket become more popular [3]

Topic:
In cities, large shopping center and supermarket become more popular than small local shop. Is this positive or negative development.

Those desirable modern shopping centers..



Answer:
In recent years, the appearance of modern shopping areas such as big commercial centers and supermarkets in the cities is more popular than small local shops. While I accept that this may be a positive development, I believe that it is also a negative one.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why this trend is beneficial in some ways. Firstly, local residents will find it easier to buy some kinds of essential things like food and household items in big-scale shopping buildings instead of going to more than one location. There is definitely a variety of products in a similar commercial complex, which is what most citizens expect these days to save their own times. Secondly, some small stores sell their products such as fruits and drinks without verified origins which is forced in either each shop of shopping complex or supermarket. If any object is bought in the supermarket, its quality will be guaranteed.

On the other hand, this development can be extremely negative. One reason is that the business of local employers will be affected because of the competition between them and the owners of commercial buildings. This will bring about a considerable decrease of local income, which may lead a part of the locals unable to make ends meet. Furthermore, the excessive growth of such large shopping areas can lead to the shortage of space for public usage. As a result, the local inhabitants will have less place to do physical activities like sports and morning exercises.

In conclusion, it is certainly true that these modern shopping buildings should be more popular, but this is by no means that these places will be excessively developed.
Buivandat   
Jul 1, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS 1 Weight group comparison; the proportion of underweight, normal-weight and overweight people [2]

Hi, here are some suggestions for your answer:
course --> in my opinion, I think you should use word: "period". Moreover, I think you should combine the first 2 sentneces into new one sentence.

the way you wrote is believed not as the best way to compare data. I think in the frist part of the body of your essay, you can compare the datas of men and women in similar term of normal weight. The second part is comparing in similar terms of under weight and over weight in order.
Buivandat   
May 29, 2018
Writing Feedback / Do we need to require sport in school curriculum? [3]

there are several mistakes in your essay above. For example:
1. there are disagree opinion --> wrong sentence structure
2. ...: educate young people and equip them --> educating, equiping
3. Sport is not only improved ... --> wrong structure
Buivandat   
May 29, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers [3]

Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

ANSWER

communication ability is decreasing



It is true that the chance to communicate face to face among people is lacking because of the over-reliance on electronic devices such as computers and cell phones. In my opinion, I completely agree with this idea.

There are a variety of reasons why the utilization these technological gadgets frequently in current time is attributable to the lose of face-to-face communication ability. Firstly, individual time which is used to complete daily works such as communicating is definitely limited. If the individual time is spent excessively for accessing the internet or playing applications on smartphones, there will be a shortage of real conversations. Secondly, because of anything about current life is also shared through the Internet and mobile phones, people will have nothing to exchange when meeting their friends and family members. Instead of that, each of them chooses to keep his/her eyes glued to their modern gadgets while sitting together.

Apart from the practical reasons expressed above, there are some different reasons which also relate to the reduction of the chance to communicate directly. One reason is that the availability of social networks such as Facebook, Skype with appealing emotional icons makes people feel it no longer necessary to talk in person but chat online instead. The more signing in the social networks, the less hanging out with friends and family. Furthermore, several people who overuse these electronic devices can face mental and physical health problems, especially headache and heart disease. As a result, they would not feel healthy enough to have a chart with their colleagues and finally they choose to stay at home.

In conclusion, I believe that the increase of using these labour-saving appliances in today's life results in reducing the ability of direct communication.
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