Posts by Tung

Tung

Jun 9, 2018

Writing Feedback / Do u think there were more advantages-disadvantages to be part of a large family in the past? IELTS2 [4]

I'm also practising writing. In my limited knowledge, I will give some comments on your essay. I think you are a bit off topic. It seems that you just discuss the large families issue in general but not that in the part. I also believe you should give the opposing attitude before giving the attitude you support. In the introduction, it seems that you havent address the task - there is not thesis statement. In the first paragraph of the body, you should give explanations and examples for each ideas. For example, what are social skills? (cooperating, communicating, etc). In addition each main idea should be clear simple sentence so that you can summarise main points in the conclusion. In the conclusion itself, you shouldnt provide new ideas (happy, lonely as in yours). As for vocabulary, I think disadvantages, a large family and advantages should be paraphrased because they have appeared in the question.

Tung

Jun 8, 2018

Writing Feedback / The paragraph in response to the topic: the disadvantages of being left-handed. [3]

the downsizes of being left-handed

There are at least three downsizes of being left-handed which can be perceived. First of all, lefties face difficulties in routine. This is understandable because items or instruments are designed for being right-handed without a special order. For example, the structure of scissors with to distinct blades, in which one is designed for a thumb, is easy to become an exercise of frustration to left-handers because they are holding it upside down. For left-handed people, writing with a pen is a challenge because their hand runs through everything written. As a result, their notes are easy to look like a mess. In addition, there are limitations for lefties to shake hands. They naturally favour their dominant left hand to shake hands, and this is regarded as lack of social skills. For instance, the American culture considers it rude to shake hands with left hand and in some parts of Asia, shaking hands with left hand can be considered to be unpleasant.