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Posts by Minh Thu
Name: Minh Thu
Joined: Jun 24, 2018
Last Post: Jul 13, 2018
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From: Viet Nam
School: lam son high school

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Minh Thu   
Jul 11, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts 1: Pie charts. The online sale section in Canada in 2005 and 2010. [3]

Topic: The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.


My essay:
The two pie charts give information about the proportion of four retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. It is clear to see that, over five years there were a significant changes in their proportion of online transactions.

In 2005 the most significant online sale was Ellectronics and Appliance which accounted 35% , but this percentage dropped to 30% in 2010. Over the same five-years period, there was a significant increased in Food and Beverage from 22% to 32% that made this became the largest amount of online sales for retail sectors in Canada.

With the regards to the remaining to methods of selling. There was an approximate 5% growth in Video G ames online sales from 18% to 23%. Home Furnishings in 2005 was a good proportion. But over five years in 2010 this figure decreased noticeablely in sale from 25% to 15%, making it the retail sector with the least overall proportion of the online market.



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Minh Thu   
Jul 11, 2018
Writing Feedback / It is true that our waste from home we do not recycle enough in our society. [3]

@feliciatu
I found some mistakes
You wrote: ...short term of changes to of recycling ...

To + V (not Ving)
"Although people would (...) tricks behind the law"---> this sentence is wrong. You should write : " Because many people are in fear of forfeit, so there are many hidden tricks behind the law"

Although+ S+V, S+V.
Minh Thu   
Jun 29, 2018
Writing Feedback / Task 2: state-of-art-technology is changing the way we learn [5]

distance-learning programmes



Topic: Many people use distance-learning programmes ( study material, post,TV, the Internet, ect) to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

My essay:

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the study method. Some poeple thinks that the state-of-art-technology can change the way we learn. Other, however make a convincing argument that the attending college or university is the best way to learn. In my view I strongly agree with the former for the following reasons.

First it is obvious that, student can save a lot of money when they joining online course. The fees of online course are cheaper than tuition fees which students have to pay for joining a college or university, moreover they do not have to pay for textbook fees and administration fees. So, it is a best way for people who keen on learning without have enough money.

In addition, distance learning can help students obtain the huge education resource. For example, many prestigious universities like Princeton, Harvard, Chicago have published many famous course in the Intenet. This is a convinient way for people who live in a remote area or developing countries where the education is quite low.

That is not to say that traditional education should be neglected. Teacher in the universities not only can improve the knowledge and skill for student, but also motivate and interact with students. But unfortunately it has drawbacks due to lack of communicate between student and teacher after class.

To sum up, distance-learning programmes can bring more benefits to the students .Meanwhile, we should not ignore the important of traditional education. Only by doing so we can create the best way of education in the future.
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