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It is true that our waste from home we do not recycle enough in our society.


feliciatu 4 / 6  
Jul 8, 2018   #1
Topic: Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

Very appreciate if you can give me the scores of IELTS.

Answers:

The strategy for recycling



It is true that our waste from home we do not recycle enough in our society. Some agree the increasing legal policy would force us to change the situation of recycling. However, I do not agree with this point of views that the government should take the full responsibilities of recycling by the following reasons.

In my opinion, the legal law is only useful for the short term of changes to recycling properly for our communities. Although people would be afraid of punishment to change the way of fully recycling their daily wastes. Therefore, there are many hidden tricks behind the law. For instance, people would do a good job on recycling in the situation that government would notice, but completely change the way outside the requirement.

Another reason is that I believe the government should do more than just implement the law, and able to educate the idea of protecting our environment. In addition, human behavior can be changed when they agree with the ideas, especially while they received the benefits which would inspire them to change the behavior. For example, the government might run a rewarding campaign to encourage the resident to take the action of recycling. Or even plan ahead in recycling concept into the early education.

In conclusion, legal policy is not only the method to make our earth an environment-friendly place to live, but also there are a variety of strategies that would change our behavior of recycling. I totally agree with the ideas of education to drive the recycling concept from the bottom which would remind deeply for the long term.

Holt [Contributor] - / 6,681 1671  
Jul 8, 2018   #2
Felicia, this is an extent essay. So where is the extent of your disagreement? This is not a simple agree/disagree situation, there needs to be a measurement of your disagreement with the statement. So you have to say "I totally disagree with this statement..." to be clear and responsive to the extent requirement of the essay.

Your second paragraph is a confusing for the reader. I read the paragraph 3 times and I still could not wrap my head around what you are trying to say. For example, your second sentence is a hanging sentence. There is a missing action within the presentation. You only have a subject presented without a verb so the sentence is incomplete. The most problematic sentence in the presentation is as follows:

Although people would be afraid ...recycling their daily wastes.

You need to clarify what you wanted to say in that sentence because it does not make any sense nor is it applicability to the discussion clear to the reader.

By the way, there is no such thing as a legal law. The law is automatically legal just like something done outside the law is automatically illegal. There is no need to state "legal law" in this instance. A reference to the "law" would have been sufficient enough.

Your concluding paragraph is flawed. While the first sentence is correct, the last sentence is wrong, you should not totally agree with the ideas you presented alone. You should also repeat that it is because of those reasons that you completely disagree with the given statement about laws being enacted to encourage more recycling.

Based on these observations, I believe that the following could be your per criteria score for this essay in an actual set up:

TA 4 - this score is based on your prompt deviation from the original presentation

Question: To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?
Response: I do not agree with this point of views that the government should take the full responsibilities of recycling

There is a big difference between the government taking full responsibility for recycling and the extent that laws are needed to make people recycle waste. Giving the government the responsibility means the government will be in charge of recycling for the people. So the people will not have any recycling duties anymore. The question is whether laws are needed to make people recycle their waste.

C&C 3 - you had ideas that were not presented in a logical and understandable manner of discussion. Refer to my discussion about this topic above for more details.

LR 4 - I explained your problem with the use of English terms above as well.

GRA 3 - I already indicated above the reasons why your essay is extremely difficult to understand in a number of instances, how you misunderstood the prompt question, and how these mistakes caused undue stress on the reader.

I hope that you will not be disheartened by the scores I gave you. You can use these grades as guidelines regarding your necessary points for improvement. I know you can still improve and that we have time to make sure that you do show improvement in your work.
Minh Thu 2 / 3  
Jul 11, 2018   #3
@feliciatu
I found some mistakes
You wrote: ...short term of changes to of recycling ...

To + V (not Ving)
"Although people would (...) tricks behind the law"---> this sentence is wrong. You should write : " Because many people are in fear of forfeit, so there are many hidden tricks behind the law"

Although+ S+V, S+V.


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