Writing Feedback / The purpose of United Kingdom residents visiting various countries between 1994 and 1998 [NEW]

people travelling

WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
You should write not less than 150 words.

The table compares the purpose of United Kingdom residents visiting abroad between 1994 and 1998, and the bar chart reveals the destinations of those visitors in the same time period.

Overall, the number of visitors showed an upward trend. A large majority of visitors in every year travelled overseas to spend their holiday, while only a few travelled abroad for business or visiting purposes. Nearly all of them travelled to places in the Western Europe.

The number of visitors gradually rose from 22072 in 1994 to 28828 in 1998. However, only around twenty thousand out of a hundred thousand people have travelled abroad, which proved that not much people actually did visits abroad in those years. A majority of people chose to spend holiday over business meetings or friends gathering.

In the group of twenty thousand visitors, nearly all visitors (around nineteen thousand) chose to visit Western Europe. Less than two thousand and five hundred people chose North America or other areas to visit. The number of people choosing Western Europe and other areas were fluctuating in those years, but in general they had an increasing trend from 19000 to 24000 and from 2000 to 3000 respectively. For North America, the number of visitors increased gradually from 1000 in 1994 to 2000 in 1998.

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Writing Feedback / Ielts task 1- usage of three spreads, including margarine, low fat & reduced spread and butter [4]

Comparison of spreads usage

The line graph illustrates the usage of three spreads, including margarine, low fat & reduced spread and butter between 1981 and 2007.

Overall, the number of these three spreads taken by consumers fluctuated. Both consumptions of butter and margarine decreased while the usage of low fat & reduced spreads rose.

Initially, there were around 90 grams of margarine spreads. The number then went up and down and reduced enormously to 40 grams in 2007. Originally, the consumption of butter is the largest among all of them in 1981 (around 145 grams), it then rose sharply to 160 grams in 1986 and reduced dramatically to 50 grams in 2007. For low fat & reduced spreads, the consumption started in 1996, it goes up rapidly to around 80 grams in 2001 and declined slightly to 70 grams in 2007

At first, the number of butter spreads outweighed the margarine spreads, and both of their numbers were larger than low fat & reduced spreads in 1996. However, at last, low fat & reduced spreads overtook both butter and margarine spreads in 2007 with the differences of around 20 grams.

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Writing Feedback / Recently, more and more rubbish are being produced by human being around the world [2]

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.

Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, more and more rubbish are being produced by human being around the world, which result in environmental pollution and spreading of disease. This essay will discuss the reasons of the increase in the amount of rubbish and provide some suggestions for the government to solve this problem.

In my opinion, modern time and fast-paced lifestyle encourage people to care more about money instead of environmental protection. As a result, people only concentrate on own profits and ignore the harmful results that things may lead to. McDonald, for instance, provides plastic spoons, forks and disks to all customers who enjoy the food right inside the restaurant, instead of employing a disk cleaner for that. All these tools are then being thrown into the rubbish bin after the meal, which causes the increase of rubbish produced. Judging from this, the selfishness of people and the decisions of the company is one of the factor causing more rubbish.

To slow down the increasing rate of rubbish produced, the government should design and set up relevant environmental protection policies to tackle the problem. One of the advice is that the government can impose taxes on products which are made of plastic, therefore people will choose to buy less plastic items as they have to pay more money than before. Take Taiwan as an example, the government of Taiwan collects taxes from shops which use plastic bags in their service. In view of this, the policy can definitely reduce the amount of rubbish produced by citizens.

Since the majority of rubbish produce are made by commercial stakeholders, with the step taken by the government towards this issue, it is my firm conviction that this can help in controlling the amount of garbage produced.

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Scholarship / My opinion whether children should learn to compete or to co-operate with others or not [2]

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The team work or a single effort

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People hold different opinions about whether children should learn to compete or to co-operate with others when they are small. I believe that learning to compete has its own benefits, but developing teamwork skills is better if people want the child to grow as a useful person.

On one hand, encouraging children to compete with others can lead to their success easily. In order to make their children superior than other kids with the same age, parents usually arrange a large variety of activities or lessons for them, such as piano classes, sports games and art lessons. As a result, the children obtain different skills at such a young age. Applying to schools, for instance, will be easier for these talented children comparing with others. In view of this, telling children to be hardworking and stand above others can cause positive results to them.

On the other hand, children who are being taught to co-operate with others tend to have more friends and thus a larger social network. Since they are not competitive, a friendly and nice image of them is then built in the others' eyes. Therefore, other people are interested in and are willing to get close to them. A recent study shows that a large majority of people choose to be friend with people who are easy to get along with rather than competitive one. Judging from this, teaching children to co-operate is preferred.

In my opinion, children should be taught to work in a team as the ability of making new friends are more vital and useful to an adult. Children who can make a good team can easily make new friends, especially in new environments, such as the first day of school or working in society. This skill definitely benefits them in the future.

In conclusion, both ideas offer advantages to children. However, since children need to deal with people in every stage of their lives, the ability to co-operate with others will always be a better option.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2- Government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home [4]

IELTS Task 2-
Some people think that the government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home to look after their children.

What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of this policy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 word.

FundS for parents raising kids

The topic of whether the government should give financial support to one of the parents of a very little children to take care of their children at home has stirred up much controversy. This essay will illustrate the benefits and drawback of this policy by using relevant examples.

To start with, funding can increase the willingness of parents to stay home, and thus improve the relationship between parent and children. On one side, by spending more time together, parents get to know more about their children. On the other side, the child likes their parents more since they always spend time together. A striking illustration will be me. I have a good relationship with my parents as my childhood memories are full of them. In view of this, this policy definitely benefits the bonding of a family.

Furthermore, parents from poor families can get the chance to stay at home for their kid. Adults in lower class families spend most of their time working, since they want to try their best to earn more money for the families. Workers in developing countries, for instance, have the longest working hours among the world. Their beloved children are then being left alone at home as a result, which is dangerous as accidents may happen to them. Similar problems can be solved by this policy, because poor families will get paid and they do not have to worry about their income.

However, this policy may lead to misunderstandings among parents on the responsible of taking care of children. They may receive an incorrect message that they are staying at home just for the money given by the government. It is sad that they do not get the real aim of this policy, which is to encourage parent staying at home for their child.

What must also be taken into consideration is that some people may take advantages of this policy. Some parents who has no urgent need of money may take this policy as a way to generate income. Money of the government, which is full of potential to be used in other useful purposes, such as medical and education, will be wasted in such case. Judging from this, this policy will waste resources and has no good to the society.

In my opinion, everything has two sides. This policy can benefit lots of new families, especially those in financial needs. It is hoped that the government can set strict regulations on the enforcement of this policy to benefit the people.

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Writing Feedback / Has knowledge about the past value for those of us living today? [3]

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The topic of whether or not learning about the past has value for those of us living at the moment has stirred up much controversy. Some of them believe that there is no value at all. Yet, those who stand on an entirely different ground claim that past events are educational and totally value our lives. Considering the arguments of both sides, I am prone to support that past events do have value.

One very strong argument is that we can learn good things from past people or events. If people in the past did something and it turned out good in the end, we should learn and follow them. Take Chinese old scholars as examples. They have good studying attitude, such as hardworking and patient. Their behaviors are being appreciate by the society at that time and was recorded in historical books. Children nowadays learn about those old masters at school, and take them as role models. In view of this, we can absolutely learn from the past.

What must also be taken into consideration is that we can avoid making the same mistake by learning from the past. When we see someone did something and it is useless or even harmful to others, we should bear in mind not to act like them. A striking illustration of the point will be me studying. In the past. I put too much time in entertainment and paid little attention on my study. As a result, I got low marks on exams and had to redo it again. This past experience gave me a life lesson. I understood that I should use time wisely and concentrate on my academic result. Later, I turned into a hardworking student and managed my time well. With this in mind, I am sure learning from the past is beneficial to our growth, as we learn to change and become a better person.

Learning about the past allows us to learn the good things and avoid doing the same bad things. It is my firm conviction that learning from the past has huge value for us. It is also hoped that people can learn not to be ashamed of past mistake. They should bear in mind that these mistakes are reminder for you to improve and act better in the future.