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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The team work or a single effort
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People hold different opinions about whether children should learn to compete or to co-operate with others when they are small. I believe that learning to compete has its own benefits, but developing teamwork skills is better if people want the child to grow as a useful person.
On one hand, encouraging children to compete with others can lead to their success easily. In order to make their children superior than other kids with the same age, parents usually arrange a large variety of activities or lessons for them, such as piano classes, sports games and art lessons. As a result, the children obtain different skills at such a young age. Applying to schools, for instance, will be easier for these talented children comparing with others. In view of this, telling children to be hardworking and stand above others can cause positive results to them.
On the other hand, children who are being taught to co-operate with others tend to have more friends and thus a larger social network. Since they are not competitive, a friendly and nice image of them is then built in the others' eyes. Therefore, other people are interested in and are willing to get close to them. A recent study shows that a large majority of people choose to be friend with people who are easy to get along with rather than competitive one. Judging from this, teaching children to co-operate is preferred.
In my opinion, children should be taught to work in a team as the ability of making new friends are more vital and useful to an adult. Children who can make a good team can easily make new friends, especially in new environments, such as the first day of school or working in society. This skill definitely benefits them in the future.
In conclusion, both ideas offer advantages to children. However, since children need to deal with people in every stage of their lives, the ability to co-operate with others will always be a better option.Hi :)
I kindly suggest
obtain -> acquire
telling children to be -> encourage..
stand above others-> attaining greater achievements than
cause->provide
not competitive-> not so competitive (i personally think not all of this friendly group is completely uncompetitive)
image of them is then built in the others' eyes -> personalities give people good impressions
people who->those
Having made some reference to this one, I believe your essay score is 6
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