Letters / Recommendation letter for my Student - Cambridge O/L, A/L [2]

Greetings i am sending you my letter of recomendation which I am writing for my student.please review it and rate this recomendation letter out of 10.Please guide me where there are mistakes.You can also suggest some suggestions.

I have taught Hamza Mathematics for four years in the Cambridge Ordinary and Advanced Levels. Being his teacher I can vouch that he is one of the most brilliant and conscientious student that I have encountered in my entire teaching career. He has a very comprehensive understanding of the subjects and has excellent analytical skills.

He has proved himself as an independent learner as he studies not only the text covering the syllabus but other books and generals related to the topics. During the lessons he would jot interesting and intelligent questions that he would ask at the end. This act of his has resulted in arousing thinking skills to develop in his classmates and better understanding of the lesson.

In my fifteen years of teaching experience I have known other students with talent equivalent to Hamza. Many of them lacked his good nature and humility. Hamza has an extremely amiable personality and is popular among his colleagues and faculty as he shows great consideration and deep respect for others. Hamza has a sound work ethic and is able to handle the pressure of deadlines well. Last November, I gave his class two extremely tedious assignments to be submitted within a couple of days on Cartesian equations, Hamza was the only one in the class who managed to submit his work on time. This shows his seriousness to work hard.On numerous occasions he helped some students in various areas in Mathematics. Soft spoken and polite, he demonstrates the best of behavior and excellent study habits.

He has striking characteristics and outstanding intellectual ability. Having innate leadership qualities, Hamza has led his college in numerous academic as well as co-curricular events.

As his teacher I strongly believe that his commitment, intellectual ability and enthusiasm for learning are qualities that should serve him well in his future endeavors. He is undoubtedly the type of student that has the potential for great success at the college level. His natural abilities, combined with his work ethic and ability to evolve academically, are recipes for success in the years to come I enthusiastically recommend him for admission to your institution.

Undergraduate / My extremely successful business - Imagine you just completed your BIOGRAPHY [2]

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IMAGINE THAT YOU HAVE JUST COMPLETED YOUR 300 PAGE BIOGRAPHY.PLEASE SUBMIT PAGE 217

following is my starting.i unable to continue this essay as i am out of ideas.please help me and narate me an outline for the essay i would be very greatful.

following is my extract

Five days before my fifty second birthday I signed an MOU with the very same corporation that had supported me in my beginning endeavors when my company had been in its teething stages. Back then I needed their help desperately and they provided it in the form of a big loan which helped me to lay the foundation stone of what was now my extremely successful corporation. However, today it was these very people who required my help. I remember feeling tremendously relieved that day, I could finally in part repay these people for what they had done for me very long ago.

As I signed the MOU, I remember very clearly a rush of nostalgia had hit me and I had been transported back in time: a 42 year old man with a bleak future. While my friends were working for multi-nationals and earning six figure salaries I was still struggling to establish myself in the world of trade and commerce. My wife had often taunted me with this very fact but I had always remained steadfast. Fiercely independent I had never relished the idea of working under someone for the rest of my life. Also being the eldest child not only in the house but also in my extended family I had donned the mantle of responsibility at a comparatively young age. Being responsible for people had become second nature to me and I had always been conscientious in my task.

However, my extremely successful business had now somewhat lost it's thrill. I had achieved almost all that I had ever wanted to and now felt as if at a standstill. It was as if I had nowhere to go... nothing to achieve anymore.

Undergraduate / Economic activity of developing country, Pakistan - personal essay [2]

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i am sending you another personal essay which is on economics.please edit it and guide me if there are any areas for corrections.please rate this essay out of 10 so that i can identify its worth.

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PERSONAL STATEMENT

Intrigued by the melodrama of the economic activity of a developing country Pakistan, I tuned myself with economic ideas. The analytical and realistic approach required by the study of economics appeals my conscience. A sound understanding of mathematical concepts has equipped me with logical thinking and problem solving abilities which are, need less to say, beneficial in economics. An indepth analysis of the problem posed by unstable Sensitive Price Index (SPI), energy inefficiency and emissions (particularly electricity) and excessive defense budget has generated my interest particularly in Development and Welfare Economics.

Diversified subjects--- Accounting, Chemistry and As Physics, have groomed my reasoning skills and enhanced my thinking abilities. General Paper in particular inculcated in me argumentative skills and taught me thorough evaluation of theories and facts. My essay on Arms Control, Disarmament, and International Security (ACDIS) won applause from my teachers as I dexterously explained the negligence of poverty due to mammoth defense expenditure.

In lieu of my interest in International trade policies and the working of WTO, I participated in a regional seminar on 'Discrimination or Globalization'. Contesting the wisdom behind encouraging imports from member states in trade bodies, I supported the developing countries in their cause. In another seminar organized by Jinnah Council of Social Sciences, I gave a presentation on 'Disasters: natural or social?' Disasters happen in society, of which economy is a subset. Therefore I maintained in my speech the importance of the role of social scientists in disaster management. I believe political and social problems of a country are immensely influenced by economic policies. My aptitude pursued me to take part in a brainstorming session on 'The political, social and economic problems of Pakistan' organized by the British Council. I was awarded the title of 'Young leader' due to my effective communicative abilities and lateral thinking. All such activities have widened my vision and hence taught me the skill to think rationally and express my views cohesively.

I believe responsibility of spreading knowledge is incumbent on educated pupil. Having the distinction of acquiring 100% in As Accounting, I taught the subject to O and As-level students. It was a gratifying experience and as I worked with students who had varied approach towards solving problems, I realized the importance of patience and significance of preservation in acquirement of success. The improvement in my communicative skills and confidence are also invaluable benefits I gained from teaching.

Participation in a nationwide Model United Nation was an enthralling experience. My profound love for economics made me represent Pakistan on the Economics committee. Development Disparities and the Millennium Development Goals (MDG) was a key issue in my address to the assembly.

My greatest honour was to be nominated as the Campus Counselor of my college in 2007. The principal nominates only those students who excel in studies, have a clean character record and enjoy high integrity among fellow students. I had to talk to students about their reckless habits, selection of subjects in O and A levels and to solve their study problems. This has been an absorbing learning venture for myself, as it equipped me with crisis resolution abilities, and instilled in me calmness when dealing with students of different temperaments.

Utilizing my counseling abilities and complementing my desire for welfare of humanity, I took care of orphans at Edhi's rehabilitation centre which, incidentally was situated adjacent to my college. It was a gratifying experience and I became conscious of my duty, as an individual to serve effectively our society.

The diversity of culture and traditions in the world are captivating for me. I participated in a 'Cultural Exchange Program' between Turkey and Pakistan organized by PakTurk Foundation. The brotherly love showered on us by the people of Turkey made me realize that through understanding and appreciation of each others cultural values, the world can become a better place.

I am an eager sportsman and played for my college cricket and football teams. In fact I was the member of the selection committee for both the teams.

In my leisure time, I read books on various topics. I like to enquire about the minds of successful individuals and found the book 'Seven habits of successful people' by Dale Carnedge quite captivating. Often I write articles in magazines such as 'Toleration in a multi-religious world' published in the 'US' magazine.

The experience of pursuing my education in Britain would be familiar for me as I have visited Britain twice. I highly anticipate commencing my university life and benefit form the high standards of teaching and research facilities available at the British Universities. I am sure that my urge to excel academically and contribute in all areas of campus life, will help me to adjust amicably in the new environment and assist me to overcome the upcoming challenge.

Undergraduate / Teaching mathematics; - PERSONAL STATEMENT [12]

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I am sending you my final personal statement.please edit it.and identify any monotonous area.or any point which is invalid.i wud request u to phrase some sentences for my sports achievement in cricket and my fitness training course.shud i include these points and where shud i include them.please phrase some sentences for me regarding this topic.

PERSONAL STATEMENT

The application and significance of mathematics in every discipline of life from space sciences to managing daily experiences is what fascinates me the most. Its complexities and logical implications further aroused my profound interest in this subject. Solving complex mathematical problems give me infinite joy and immortal satisfaction. I believe that this passion has instilled in me logical, coherent and realistic thinking skills. Applied mathematics is what I have aimed for myself. My ultimate desire, to design mathematical models, has inspired me to apply for the courses of engineering, Actuarial Sciences and Operations research. I believe that each of these courses will eventually pave my way and fulfill my desire

My choice of diverse subjects at the A Level, has strongly supported my desired goals. Chemistry Physics and AS Biology has helped me broaden my depth of logical awareness. Economics is one subject of social sciences which complements my other subjects of interest, i.e., Maths and Physics. I am deeply involved with these three disciplines. Physics has equipped me with logical awareness, Math has enabled me to develop an abstract mode of thought and thinking ability, whereas, Economics has taught me an analytical approach to tackle distinctly organic and complex concepts. This triangle has intrigued me so much that I see my future revolving around these three fields

I am currently enjoying further Maths study. Though my college is not offering this subject, it is purely my love and obsession for this subject that has persuaded me to make an exceptional effort to study it on my own. This is a unique experience for me and has given me a valuable chance to develop extraordinary problem solving skills and dexterity in handling practical problems.

I always believe that those of us who are privileged, both with respect to talent and abilities, are obliged to contribute on a larger scale. My efforts to establish a mathematical society for the first time was a step in this direction. I arranged mathematical contests for the students of different levels and participated myself in the National Mathematical Olympiad, held in 2006. Being an active member of T.N.S Mathematical Society, I attended many seminars which added to my knowledge of theoretical and practical aspects of applied mathematics.

I never thought that teaching mathematics could be so satisfying, until I experienced teaching remedial classes of O and A levels students. Considering my strong conceptual base and communication skills, I was appointed as an assistant to the professor of mathematics. This was altogether a new experience because it provided me information about some totally new aspects of Mathematics

Active participation in a variety of activities has enhanced my self-confidence and helped me to LEARN MORE ABOUT MY ENVIRONMENT.One such activity was my internship with the Women Aid Trust this year.It was a gratifying experience to help poor and distressed women in rehabilitation.The other significant land mark in my student life so far has been holding the posts of the G-SEC of the student concil in 2007 and the president in 2007.In these capacities,I brought into lime light some of the basic problems the students had been facing and was sucessful in getting them solved.My most memorable contribution was to organize a Model United Nations involving 20 different schools of Islamabad.This was a ocasion which i luckily utilized to learn leadership,organization skills,crises resolution and event management.

I was chosen by my school as the Head Delegate of the School Links Program organised by the British Council. My participation in this program ignited my interest in British education and, with my experience with the GCE O level and A level programs, I feel confident to apply for the undergraduate programs at the leading British universities.

I look forward to the challenge of designing mathematical models and other applications of mathematical knowledge in my career. I believe that the wide spectrum of curriculum and highly supportive faculties at the top class British universities will help me to excel.