oanhkieu208
Aug 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 2: why many people still go hungry although the advance made in agriculture [5]
thanks for your help. it is really useful
thanks for your help. it is really useful
oanhkieu208
Aug 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2- Should newcomers follow new country's traditions? [4]
hi Caroline. I think you should not use words such as everthing, something or anything because it is not clear. Try to find diffrent words or paraphrases.
Ex:Everyone People has their own ...
the words " you, we, us, our" are not also used in Ielts writing task 2 because they are informal. you can replace these word with " they or their" or paraphrases.
I hope you get a high score in Ielts test.
hi Caroline. I think you should not use words such as everthing, something or anything because it is not clear. Try to find diffrent words or paraphrases.
Ex:
the words " you, we, us, our" are not also used in Ielts writing task 2 because they are informal. you can replace these word with " they or their" or paraphrases.
I hope you get a high score in Ielts test.
oanhkieu208
Aug 14, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELT Task 2: Building function or exterior design? Which is more important? [2]
you should avoid using "we" and "you" or "us", because, in ielts writing, you have to write in formal style and it also sound like you are teaching the examiner. You can replace these word with "they" or use differents word or pharses
you should avoid using "we" and "you" or "us", because, in ielts writing, you have to write in formal style and it also sound like you are teaching the examiner. You can replace these word with "they" or use differents word or pharses
oanhkieu208
Aug 14, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 2: why many people still go hungry although the advance made in agriculture [5]
In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people in the world still go hungry. What is the cause? What can be done
Although, agriculture, in this age, have been developed considerably. There are still a worrying number of people who are hungry. In this essay, after giving some reasons, I will suggest solution for this problem.
The two main shortcomings is probably lack of arable land means. Firstly, people recently use land for accommodation and building which are distinct to serve residents. It is not advisable that urbanization increase at such a high speech, resulting in insufficient soil for planting and breeding. It is clearly that the growth of agriculture is not effective if there is not sufficient land. The second reason is technology applied for agriculture seem to be expensive and unsuitable for every pocket. These modern techniques are just utilized in developed countries which have strong economy condition. In Africa, take an example, an underdeveloped continent which includes the backward and poor countries, they can not cause the technology because of its high expense. From all the reasons, despite the fact that the agriculture in in developing trend, it still can not the efficient solution for the situation of food shortage.
To solve this problem, I personally think that vertical farming will be an answer for lack of food. It is a cultivating vegetable vertically by new agriculture, which combine the design of building and farm all together in high-rise buildings. It is an ingenious method of agriculture to produce food in any places, even inside crowded cities where arable land is unavailable or rare at the most. Vertical farming is perceived as capable measure for not only developed countries where is unavailable soil but also poor countries where have not sufficient money to cover all the expense of modern technology.
To conclude, there are two main reason causing food shortage. One is lack of arable land. The other is about money. It is predicted that vertical farming will be the reasonable solution, being suitable with the remaining reasons
Reasons for food shortage in the modern world
In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people in the world still go hungry. What is the cause? What can be done
Although, agriculture, in this age, have been developed considerably. There are still a worrying number of people who are hungry. In this essay, after giving some reasons, I will suggest solution for this problem.
The two main shortcomings is probably lack of arable land means. Firstly, people recently use land for accommodation and building which are distinct to serve residents. It is not advisable that urbanization increase at such a high speech, resulting in insufficient soil for planting and breeding. It is clearly that the growth of agriculture is not effective if there is not sufficient land. The second reason is technology applied for agriculture seem to be expensive and unsuitable for every pocket. These modern techniques are just utilized in developed countries which have strong economy condition. In Africa, take an example, an underdeveloped continent which includes the backward and poor countries, they can not cause the technology because of its high expense. From all the reasons, despite the fact that the agriculture in in developing trend, it still can not the efficient solution for the situation of food shortage.
To solve this problem, I personally think that vertical farming will be an answer for lack of food. It is a cultivating vegetable vertically by new agriculture, which combine the design of building and farm all together in high-rise buildings. It is an ingenious method of agriculture to produce food in any places, even inside crowded cities where arable land is unavailable or rare at the most. Vertical farming is perceived as capable measure for not only developed countries where is unavailable soil but also poor countries where have not sufficient money to cover all the expense of modern technology.
To conclude, there are two main reason causing food shortage. One is lack of arable land. The other is about money. It is predicted that vertical farming will be the reasonable solution, being suitable with the remaining reasons