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Posts by Eram01
Name: Eram Anwar
Joined: Aug 30, 2018
Last Post: Sep 3, 2018
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From: Pakistan
School: University of Lahore

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Eram01   
Sep 3, 2018
Writing Feedback / Language barrier is one of the major hurdles, which is usually encountered by people overseas [3]

Actually, I have read in Pauline book it is best to give your point of view, whether you agree or disagree, in the conclusion part of the essay rather than the introduction. So a generalized statement should be given which will indicate what you're going to talk about in your essay.

I am having difficulty in creating that generalized statement. I will read the model answers and will work on it.

What about the rest of the essay? is it okay? Development of ideas? Coherence & Cohesion? Grammar?
Eram01   
Aug 31, 2018
Writing Feedback / Language barrier is one of the major hurdles, which is usually encountered by people overseas [3]

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent you agree or disagree with the statement?


communication in foreign language abroad



Language barrier is one of the major hurdles, which is usually encountered by overseas people, and it may result in plenty of significant societal and real life issues. In my view, communication in non-native language brings noticeable problems for foreigners but there must be possible solutions of these issues.

Admittedly, speaking a new language is hard task and not every individual, residing abroad, can master the language of respective country in which he is living. This inability would result in misconception and misunderstanding. For example, a person is unable to covey his thoughts and ideas in accurate words, which might be misunderstood by the natives and it may offend them. In addition, people may have least chances of getting the job, as they cannot effectively communicate. For instance, if a foreigner has to deal clients in his job, he cannot perform his task without effective language skills. Hence, I believe language barriers will pose significant hurdles for people living in foreign countries.

Nevertheless, above-mentioned problems can be profoundly controlled. People while planning to move in any country should learn about the culture and language of that country. For instance, joining a language course would be definitely helpful. Almost all countries offer these courses for non-natives. Moreover, while going abroad, decide your career path and do your homework regarding job requirement there before applying. To illustrate, you chose marketing job, you should have excellent communication in that country's language to fulfill your duties. It will enhance you selection chances. Consequently, I think reasonable ways can be adopted by overseas individuals to reduce all these obstacles.

In conclusion, communication in foreign language leads to communal conflicts due to misapprehension and practical life hurdles are unavoidable. I totally agree with the statement but these problems can be noticeably reduced by following preventive ways.
Eram01   
Aug 31, 2018
Writing Feedback / Prevalance of supermarket leads to the death of smaller bussinesses? IELTS writing task 2 [3]

Weak areas are grammar, sentence structure, wrong use of words e.g minor business.

For conclusion follow this structure,
Rephrase/summarize para 1 and para 2 and then agree / disagree.

Practice more and more. Official guide to Cambridge is of great help. Follow Pauline ( official test writer).

Read carefully about the band descriptors . It will help you to practice in the right direction.
Eram01   
Aug 31, 2018
Writing Feedback / Some believe that taking a year off between school and college is a top-notch decision [5]

You should write a thesis statement with your general opinion rather than this "The two sights are going to ..."

You need to work on sentence structure. It is difficult to depict ideas from your sentences. Wrong use of collocation e.g securely protect,major suits,effectively effect.

You need to work hard on your writing. Start from the grammar. Read books like official guide to Cambridge and The Key to IELTS Success.

You must know how writing is marked i-e
Task achievement,
Coherence and cohesion
Lexical resource
Grammar and vocab..

Improve your writing accordingly. Read how band 6,7,8,9 are marked it would help you to practice in the right direction.
Eram01   
Aug 31, 2018
Writing Feedback / Our eating habits greatly affect our lifestyle; for a healthy life eating a balanced food is crucial [6]

Thank you . "Para 2" I wrote it mistakenly, Actually I wrote it for planing the essay and forgot to erase it. I hope I won't do this mistake in the official test as I can write points on question book.

I will work on the other highlighted problems. Your feedback is very helpful.
Can you share your version of this statement "In my view, negligence in eating can lead to health problems and diseases, which ultimately badly affects the lifestyle of people."
Eram01   
Aug 30, 2018
Writing Feedback / Our eating habits greatly affect our lifestyle; for a healthy life eating a balanced food is crucial [6]

Eating a balanced diet is the most important factor for a healthy life. To what extent do you agree?

every individual should develop a habit of eating healthy



Our eating habits greatly affect our lifestyle. It is said, that for a healthy life eating a balanced food is crucial. In my view, negligence in eating can lead to health problems and diseases, which ultimately badly affects the lifestyle of people.

Undoubtedly, trend of eating fast food is profoundly prevailing these days. Especially youngsters are eating more junk food, which leads to non-curable diseases such as obesity, hypertension and diabetes. This is because youngsters prevent themselves from the hassle of cooking. Moreover, due to busy lifestyle, people do not have time for cooking and they do not even take proper meals, which, therefore, is immensely affecting them by making them weak and deficient of important nutrients. Hence, due to poor diet habits people are becoming prone to unhealthy conditions and diseases

Para 2
Admittedly, consuming fresh, nutrient rich and healthy food makes an individual healthy and he can obviously lead a better lifestyle as compare to people following bad eating habits.

For instance, a person eating food containing all essential nutrients such as carbohydrates, fats and proteins would definitely be getting adequate nutrition and will be less likely to suffer from disease conditions. In addition, he will stay active and healthy. So balanced food is vital as it aids to maintain a healthy life.

In conclusion, People eating food with inadequate nutrients are at greater risk of carrying diseases while individuals consuming healthy food with equal proportions of necessary nutrients can enjoy a healthy life. Therefore, I totally agree with the fact that every individual should develop a habit of eating a balanced diet as it guarantees you a better life.
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