Posts by Shao Yu Sung

Shao Yu Sung

Sep 1, 2018

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - Waste disposal in an European country [3]

hi,I am sorry that i am not the expert in this area,but I have some alterations to share with you.
1.You may need to check if your characters is enough to reach the standard of IELTS Writing Task one. It seems that you only have 145words in your article.

2.I suggest that you have to check the sentence of "People used burning method...".I think that the sentence is a little bit weird and perhaps you need to use [ the method of/for something] instead of using the words"burning method"

3.Your second paragraph shows some numbers.The usage don't any mistakes, but I consider that you can try to use the word"billion"instead of using the word" million"in the whole paragraph.

4.In the sentence [... high,1800 million tonnes],I guess you want to spell the word "tons" not "tonnes". Moreover,I wonder if you can just wrote the number behind a comma.

5.lastly, in your last paragraph of your essay, my advise is that you can use the sentence pattern like "in contrast"or something else to indicate this is your final parts of the article.

These are my opinions for you. I hope you can make a great progress in preparing IELTS!

Shao Yu Sung

Sep 1, 2018

Writing Feedback / The number of customers in Mama's Café, Good Eats and Tom's Diner. [2]

Costumers in three restaurants

The line graph illustrates the customer numbers in three restaurants during a five-days period. Overall, the number of customers in Mama's Café and Good Eats are far more than in Tom's Diner.

Look at more details in the data. The amount of customers in Mama's Café reached the lowest point in three-days period. The figure showed that the number of costumers drop off rapidly from 250 people to 100 people approximately. Afterward, the numbers bounced back in the last two days and got to about 250 people again. On the other hand, costumers in Good Eats remain rise during the five days. It number stood at 250 people which was same as Mama's Café. Lastly, the number of costumers in Tom's Diner fluctuated up and down in the five days. Furthermore, the chart indicated that it reached the lowest point in the forth day for zero. In comparison with the other restaurants, the amount of costumers in Tom's Diner was the smallest.

In conclusion, the fluctuation of costumer numbers in Mama's Café was the most noticeable, and the figure in the line graph of Good Eats grew steady. Subsequently, costumers in Tom's Diner was the lowest according to the chart.