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Name: Qamar Adeel
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School: University of Punjab

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qamaradeel   
Sep 4, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - THE AGE AT WHICH PEOPLE RETIRE FROM WORK SHOULD BE RAISED CONSIDERABLY. TRUE OR NOT? [3]

Your writing has many flaws, its not eye catching and there are grammatical mistakes as well. Moreover Your arguments are premature.

"there is a litmitaion in human working ability" try using passive sentence something like The human capability to work is limited.

"their health is vey wonderful" try saying they have are fit and healthy and they can work with full efficiency

"the time they are at the age of 35" say "At 35 their health starts declining"
qamaradeel   
Sep 2, 2018
Scholarship / Critical Analysis of the Essay with regard to statement and conditions under subject is required! [4]

meeting leadership requirement



We are looking for individuals who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.

(minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)


To me an effective leader is someone who has an inspiring vision for future. He should be able to motivate and influence people to engage with his vision. He has to be humble and strong at the same time.

Throughout my life I have been part of various successful projects. As a student I was an active member of management for various student events. I have led a team of fund raisers. As a professional I executed Go Green Project of WWF in my office. These experiences have made me a strong decision maker and equipped me with skills such as people management, relationship building, delegation and empowerment which are prerequisites of leadership

After my graduation I joined a Project named World Food Bank. This project focused on providing meals for the poorest people in Pakistan and relied on teams of volunteers for raising funds. Since I had done an online course of fund raising I was made the leader of a team of 5.

I started the work with collaborative decision making and asked each member to give his input for achieving the goal. Being the leader I took the initiative to speak my mind out and eased nerves of others. My idea was "Give Something Back to the Donor" to engage the donor and build credibility. I suggested designing a ticket with a monetary value of Rs. 50. The whole plan was to sell tickets to donors to give them a feeling accomplishment. This idea was readily accepted and others also hopped in with their inputs. We ended up with a lot of innovative ideas for fund raising such as, Visiting universities and organizations to engage local public in this noble cause.

The next steps were, designing Material, preparing speech, scheduling visits and collecting funds. I gave specific task to each member depending upon his interest and expertise in the relevant task. Doing my fair share of work, I wrote the speech.

Within a Week we were able to start the field work. I created sub teams of two and three for the visits. My team went to Punjab University. My team mate showed interest of delivering the speech which I happily accepted to give him equal chance of Projecting himself. At first He felt a little uneasy facing huge crowd, but after a little encouragement from me he did a pretty good job and we ended up collecting handsome amount from this session.

Continuing our efforts we successfully completed our target of Rs. 50,000 by the end of the month. This whole experience was very helpful and always reminds me the importance of teamwork and coordination. I have also learnt that leaders can change everything if they have the passion towards their vision. As a young leader, I have good accomplishments. Now I am looking forward for Chevening scholarship that will bring me one step closer to my vision of revolutionizing the public sector governance in Pakistan.
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