Undergraduate / my motivations and aspirations for going to NJCU essay [3]

Okay, they are basically asking you the following questions, so please think about these and ask others if you still cannot come up with anything.

Why do you want to attend NJCU? What do they have to offer to you that is unique to your interests and potential career path? What interests and what about yourself has led you to select that career path?

Undergraduate / My personal point of view on animal cruelty and abuse [5]

Nice, but I wouldn't lit up with numbers like that at least write those numbers under 100 out or I recommend that you try using a different structure.

Writing Feedback / 'discussion in Indian parliament' Teens have paid jobs during studying? (Toefl) [8]

Definitely elaborate more

Grammar, Usage / compound, complex, compund complex [5]

Just read that part as Maria went shopping and it makes sense and stands alone.
A sentence with at least two independent clauses and one or more dependent clauses (which can also be called subordinate clause) is referred to as a complex-compound sentence.