James1135
Oct 13, 2018
James1135
Oct 12, 2018
Undergraduate / Common App essay on baking. Cake as a form of expression [4]
Great essay! "lightbulb" is actually two words, you used it twice in your essay. I'd suggest adding a comma after year in your second paragraph. If I was you I'd add a adjective when you talk about the easy bake oven, "4 x 0.5-inch pan and 100-watt lightbulb." This would just give it more content and spice it up a bit.
Great essay! "lightbulb" is actually two words, you used it twice in your essay. I'd suggest adding a comma after year in your second paragraph. If I was you I'd add a adjective when you talk about the easy bake oven, "4 x 0.5-inch pan and 100-watt lightbulb." This would just give it more content and spice it up a bit.
James1135
Oct 12, 2018
Undergraduate / Parents and Pastors - AppplyTexas essay topic A [3]
If y'all could take a look at my
Family. The one thing that can greatly determine the outlook that one has on life. My parents instilled positive and honest values upon me. Without these parents and values they gave me I wouldn't be where I'm at today; applying for college. My family has shaped me into becoming a honest and hard working man.
Growing up with parents that were prior youth pastors changes the way you grow up compared to a typical child in the United States. My parents always taught me to never do anyone wrong, incorporating honesty as best as they could into everyday situations. As a child we were at CVS and my brother and I stole a pack of gum and hid it, but much to our dismay our mother found it. She insisted that we go back to the store admit our wrongs and pay for the gum with our own money from our piggy banks. My mom taught me something very critical in life that day, honesty. Honesty will get you places, people respect an honest person and therefore will think of them in a superior way.
My parents have always taught me to have a positive outlook on life. A pessimist will often struggle to make great achievements that can further advance them in life. My parents always said, "a positive attitude can lead to great success and happiness." I totally believe this, i found that having a positive attitude when I'm working in the sweltering Texas heat will get me places instead of just taking the easy way out and not doing the work. The teaching of always having a positive helped me to easily overcome the everyday affairs in life that I had. Many decide to take the easy way out and not handle some of their problems but I always think of the positive and it has greatly helped me become happier. Positive thinking is essential in everyday life.
Being a young adult I don't know everything but my parents have definitely given me a boost in the way they raised me up and I believe it has considerably helped me in life. The everyday lessons that I received from doing wrong in everyday activities has greatly helped me in life. The environment people are raised in greatly influences their everyday actions and thoughts.
If y'all could take a look at my
application essay for Texas A&M
and give me any critiques I'd greatly appreciate it.Family. The one thing that can greatly determine the outlook that one has on life. My parents instilled positive and honest values upon me. Without these parents and values they gave me I wouldn't be where I'm at today; applying for college. My family has shaped me into becoming a honest and hard working man.
Growing up with parents that were prior youth pastors changes the way you grow up compared to a typical child in the United States. My parents always taught me to never do anyone wrong, incorporating honesty as best as they could into everyday situations. As a child we were at CVS and my brother and I stole a pack of gum and hid it, but much to our dismay our mother found it. She insisted that we go back to the store admit our wrongs and pay for the gum with our own money from our piggy banks. My mom taught me something very critical in life that day, honesty. Honesty will get you places, people respect an honest person and therefore will think of them in a superior way.
My parents have always taught me to have a positive outlook on life. A pessimist will often struggle to make great achievements that can further advance them in life. My parents always said, "a positive attitude can lead to great success and happiness." I totally believe this, i found that having a positive attitude when I'm working in the sweltering Texas heat will get me places instead of just taking the easy way out and not doing the work. The teaching of always having a positive helped me to easily overcome the everyday affairs in life that I had. Many decide to take the easy way out and not handle some of their problems but I always think of the positive and it has greatly helped me become happier. Positive thinking is essential in everyday life.
Being a young adult I don't know everything but my parents have definitely given me a boost in the way they raised me up and I believe it has considerably helped me in life. The everyday lessons that I received from doing wrong in everyday activities has greatly helped me in life. The environment people are raised in greatly influences their everyday actions and thoughts.
