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Posts by yyoussef [Suspended]
Name: youssef ahmed
Joined: Nov 1, 2018
Last Post: Nov 5, 2018
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From: Egypt
School: Al-Alsun

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yyoussef   
Nov 5, 2018
Undergraduate / Describe your academic and career goals in the broad field of engineering [3]

i think that you need to skip the part of giving up since it has a negative impact on the reader or maybe re paraphrasing that it wasn't easy but not to include this in conclusion. And also try to describe the impact of your mother's piece of advice in your career in a better way, as it seems as if she has chosen your path, which won't help you to make your essay impressive to the reader.
yyoussef   
Nov 5, 2018
Undergraduate / Common App essay - talking about challenges I've faced throughout my life [5]

I think that the story is dramatic, describing the sequence of events was dramatic.
I just didn't find the opening so encouraging.
You spent a lot of time describing how normal the Peanuts for everyone might be but i think you can shorten this part since we understood that you had allergy to peanuts.
yyoussef   
Nov 1, 2018
Scholarship / The key words describing a successful leader - Leadership and influence (Chevening) [4]

consistency, inspiring, self-motivation



I have always believed that consistency, inspiring and self-motivation are the keywords of most of being a successful leader. A good leader must have a futuristic vision, moreover to be able to analyze the reality and solve the current problems.

During the first year of university, i joined the staff of students' union, throughout the election phase i learnt how to express my view in developing the university and i learnt practically how to influence small groups such as my colleagues and my college students. I have also learnt many ways to explain my opinions and views, for instance i had a great challenge since it was my first year and i needed to get renown to be elected as there have been so many candidates who were equal to the position, but i had the highest number of voices because i manged to make alliances and created Coalition with other parties to assure raising my chances in gathering voices.

The second challenge was implementing this vision on a wider scale, so i managed to lead the scientific committee as the president and launched three different social projects continuously over the 4 Years in my voluntary work: The projects were ( Help your mate (Ethical), Be a tour guide (business) and The college got talent (Artificial)). There were also many operational obstacles as in the project (Be a tour guide (business)), we had to afford comfortable buses for students and the tutorial guides within the available budget, so i was able to raise the funding budget from the student's committee showing the effect of the project on the business view of the students, on the other hand i raised the funding by adding a reasonable costs to the end-user, increasing the quality allowed the project to be continues for 3 years due to successful organization and high-quality.

These three Projects were absolutely the cornerstone of my practical life and helped me finding a place in a multinational telecommunication company like Vodafone, which i consider as a very important job in my career path in which i have been promoted for achievements and my professional attitude with my colleagues and supervisors to be a floorwalker.

I hope that the Chevening award would be a profitable step in my career for getting better opportunities in life and career.
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