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Posts by Jean Lin
Name: Jean Lin
Joined: Jan 6, 2019
Last Post: Jan 12, 2019
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From: Taiwan
School: National Cheng Kung University

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Jean Lin   
Jan 12, 2019
Writing Feedback / Effects of technology (impact on users and on different industries). 250 word essay [4]

There some mistakes that you made:

1. You should avoid word repetition, like, technology.
2. Attached the questions(e.g. to agree or disagree, explain both idea of..) on the top of the essay.
3. The essay structure should be more clear.
4. Also, use more conjunctions to explain your ideas and make the essay more readable.
Jean Lin   
Jan 11, 2019
Writing Feedback / IETLS Task2: The power of advertising, and its influence on consumer buying - agree or disagree [3]

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The Role of Advertising in Consumer Decision



It is true that many people who were influenced by advertising by companies to buy their products. I partially agree that some people would make a purchase because of advertisements, but there are still some people make decisions depending on their real needs.

Advertising is a good way to promote a new product and it has some influences on people's buying behaviour. In most of the dramas, some products are always shown in the specific plot and also the main roles introduce the function of products in order to catch the audience's attention. Such kind of marketing method is called product placement, which can persuade people to make orders. Smartphone, for example, is usually used to demonstrate its new function in dramas, so audiences easily get a good impression on it. The possibility for people to buy the products is therefore increasing.

However, most people make purchases because of their real needs. While advertising could leave a good impression of products to people, they would think about the necessity of buying goods according to their income. Costumers would be impossible to buy products that they can not affordable on the ground that it may lead them to overdrafts. Some people, for an instance, who are indulged in buying designer labels, are not able to pat bill all a time. Once the new products hit them, they make orders without considering how much their income is. Therefore, they gradually have to pay lots of bills but could not pay it all in time. Finally, they become bankrupt and no one can help them.

In conclusion, while advertising has some impacts on people's buying behaviour, they would still make a decision depended on their real needs.
Jean Lin   
Jan 6, 2019
Writing Feedback / IETLS Writing Task2: It is more important to teach the literature and history of their own country [3]

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own country, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

the importance of teaching children history and literature



People may have different views about educating children the history and literature of their own nation rather than that of other countries. In my perspective, I totally agree this argument that children should know more knowledge of their own country from history and literature.

For these two reasons why children should be taught more about the stories based on the history and literature. On the one hand, children can learn the lesson from history and literature which happened to the great person so that children would have a better development. For example,World War II started due to benefits to some nations and caused inevitable damages on human being. Therefore, in order to prevent this situation from repeating, educating children national history and literature to let them know the reason why the war got starting. On the other hand, children can be more familiar with their own country by knowing more stories behind the nation through studying history and literature. Also, it makes children more understand who they are on this planet.

However, what if children only study history and literature of their own country, what will happen? It's believed that children will lose the sense of identity, which will lead to a ruined consequence, causing them escaping from their own country. Besides, children may make the same mistake as the great person of their own country such this problem might interfere children's growing.

In conclusion, it is crucial to teach children the history and literature of their own nation, which would make them more realize themselves.
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