gbhanjana
Jan 29, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Grouping students in regard to their behaviour [4]
I am not a native speaker but few errors I can highlight in your essay so that u improve next time.
Introduction: Your opinion is not clear : I do that agree to this ...
Try to write outline statement with a small reason to your agreement or disagreement
There should be atleast two body paragraphs
Few errors highlighted below:
other fellow classmate use only "classmate" or change the sentence as something looks wrong here.
Every student...are is different
each all of them
the their responsibilities
A lot of school follows
Also, try to use multiple sentence structures in your essay
Conclusion: your opinion is not clear in conclusion
it is absolutely necessary for the schools to not group them as per their behaviour rephrase the sentence as it is confusing
I am not a native speaker but few errors I can highlight in your essay so that u improve next time.
Introduction: Your opinion is not clear : I do that agree to this ...
Try to write outline statement with a small reason to your agreement or disagreement
There should be atleast two body paragraphs
Few errors highlighted below:
Every student...
A lot of school follow
Also, try to use multiple sentence structures in your essay
Conclusion: your opinion is not clear in conclusion
it is absolutely necessary for the schools to not group them as per their behaviour rephrase the sentence as it is confusing