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Name: Doyle Kim
Joined: Feb 22, 2019
Last Post: Feb 24, 2019
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Feb 24, 2019
Writing Feedback / Due to the internet invention, the world is getting smaller by connecting people - task 2 [3]

Depending on the letter count, I think it would be great to add more resources and background informations as to why you thought the internet has brought people together. Strong first paragraph, but it slowly fades away to the conclusion, making your point almost invalid. Great skeletal structure, however (imho) I think you should add more muscles into it to backup your opinion. Goodluck!
Iscoo   
Feb 22, 2019
Undergraduate / Ritsumeikan University undergraduate application essay; What are you proud of? [3]

Topic:
Write about past experience that you are proud of and how you intend to apply this experience in Global Studies Major at Ritsumeikan University
300 words

I finished writing this essay about a month ago and just needed some feedbacks to finalize :)

overcoming language and cultural barriers



Throughout my childhood, I moved to new places and new schools frequently. Never having the joy of growing up with a best friend in the same neighborhood, at first I blamed my parents and regretted my decisions that led up to me moving every two years. But in the end, I realized that this experience was the most powerful card in the deck.

Moving to New Zealand at 11 years old, not knowing how to speak English and feeling isolated by strangers' glares were enough to scare me to adjust to reality and into solitary. I had to adapt to their culture and languages in order to stand up for myself and my younger brother. Three months into the jungle, I was able to fight back a child who verbally abused me with racist slurs.

Next destination was Canada, where instead of feeling frightened, I elaborated what I've learned in New Zealand to immerse myself into the new community. I grew up with people with broaden perspectives and acceptance towards other cultures, allowing me to apprehend their principles and enriching mine as well. By overcoming language and cultural barriers as a student with English as their second language, I felt proud and confident by the time I came back to Korea.

It is because these combination of experiences, that made me who I am today. Going through adversities and learning to stand up for myself helped to endure hardships and adapt to surroundings. This paved my way into becoming a person who is not abided to entitled perspectives, but a person who accepts and adapts to different aspects of culture. By studying Global Studies in Ritsumeikan University, I aim to apply my past experience to support the surrounding environment and widen student's perspectives into becoming global leaders.
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