Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey - money spent on consumer goods [3]

Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002

The given table presents the percentage which clients consume their money on different goods in five countries namely Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey.

Overall, this is evident that people in the world prefer affording food/drinks/tobacco to other items. As can be seen that Turkey had the highest proportion compared to others while the major field Leisure/Education was neglected seriously especially in Spain.

First of all, with the greatest percentage in Food/Drinks/Tobacco, Turkey went first, followed by Ireland which stood at roughly 33% and 29%. Besides, the amount of consumer expenditure in Turkey was higher and twice as much as that in Italy.

On the other hand, it seems to be the case that beside the demand for food/drinks/tobacco, people were still big on hanging out for shopping. Additionally, the number of Italians shopping accounted for 9% whereas these data in four countries were recorded to be slightly fewer (nearly 5%). Turning to leisure/education, the overall percentage was immensely less than 2-3 times in comparison with two aforementioned aspects. However, there are no significant differences between Clothing/Footwear and Leisure/Education in both Sweden and Turkey.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: In some regions, a great number of young adults are elected for key roles in the government [4]

young in power

Topic: Nowadays more and more young people hold the important positions in the government.
Some people think that is a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some regions, a great number of youngers are elected for key roles in the government. While some people claim that is unfair compared to the olders; many others, myself included, believe it is beneficial for our society. However, I will take these two viewpoint into consideration when discussing them in this essay.

To begin with, the fact of the matter is that youngsters are mostly lack of real experience as they have never challenged or dealt with a great many difficult situations. Moreover, a tiny part of young people are irresponsible, pass the buck when making mistakes and have a signal for capitalizing their roles. Based on those viewpoints, a host of people criticize many young leaders and are not in favour of their current positions. In addition, with the shortage of social skills, these young authorities can have difficulty in solving international problems or establishing the legislation. Gradually, their decisions can stagnate the economic recession and pose a threat to everyone's income as a result.

On the other hand, the youngsters also have some advantages with regard to their age and high passion. Unlike the olders, they have a very long period to develop and complete themselves step by step. They have their youth hence they may be not hesitate to take risk in making decisions and choosing the most ultimate path. By virtue of being born in the industry 4.0 coupled with many significant breakthroughs in technology, the young people can have more chance to learn, become modern, creative and sophisticated. Additionally, one of the key factors contributing to the success in any occupations is the passion. Therefore, the working productivity of many young leaders are always high and effective.

In conclusion, the question whether or not young people should hold many inevitable roles in the government creates a lot of attraction from people but I want to reaffirm that having many young leaders can be beneficial for us due to some aforementioned reasons.

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