Writing Feedback / The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US. [5]

Hello, I can see that there are too much unecessary repetiitons, such as "quantity" or "production", "fall", "decrease", "period" and some of the centences are not well-paraphase. Try to search for more word to descirble changes instead of using basic verbs like "fall, increase,...", then replace with "jump, accelerate, decline, shrink" or some phases like "reach a peak at", "stand at", "hit a historic low".

You also need to use more adj or adv such as "hardly, dramatically, considerable, notable,..." These are very important in achieving higher Ielts scores.

Please remember to add a picture of the chart next time so people will not find diffiiculties in correcting your writing. Good luck!

Writing Feedback / Equal Distribution; there should be same chances for both genders to get post-graduate studies [5]

I'll try my best to help you. Your essay has quite a lot mistakes, especially too much repetiitons in both words and structures. For instance:

-... there should be same chances for both genders
-there should be equal chances for ...
-As there would be chance for ...
- there are some rules that some majors
You should replace it with another words such as "opportunities" or "prospect", "occasion"

Another thing is that you should learn more about paraphrasing the sentences and try to use different kind of structures.
Ex: "Some scientist believe that" can change to "It is evident that" or "It is believed that"

You also need to write in a formal way.
-"The other reason that make me think" can change to "To my extent", "From my point of view" or "In my opinion".
- "As we mention one trouble in this area we can say:" --> This is only using for speaking sessions.

Besides, there are some incorrect grammar usage, like "... it is not fear that many" or "... in the atmosphere that this education complete ..." (I can't barely understand@@)