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ttttiffanyyyy

Jul 18, 2019

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1 (1) The table gives information about changes in modes of travel in England.... [2]

The table manifests English public traveling in different modes has changed from 1985 to 2000, inclusive of walking, bicycle, car, local bus, long distance bus, train, taxi, and other.

According to the table, the total amount of average distance in miles travelled per person per year shows a significantly accretion, by 1735 miles. Cars were the most popular transportation in England in both 1985 and 2000. Taxi had the least miles between any other travel modes in 1985, accounted for 13 miles, although the amount of taxi's miles increased in 2000, taxi were still classified as an unpopular transportation, constituted 42 miles.

The changes of different travel modes between 1985 and 2000 can divided into two parts, increasing and decreasing. Car, long distance bus, train, taxi, and other transportation got accretions from 1985 to 2000, however, train and taxi increased slightly, by no more than 100 miles. Walking, bicycle, and local bus decreased during 1985 to 2000.

Overall, car were always the main travel mode in England. In contrast, bicycle and taxi were the least popular transportation for English public.

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ttttiffanyyyy

Jul 18, 2019

Writing Feedback / The widespread use of the internet has affected people life in mostly positive way. [2]

I am not a native speaker, but I would like to try my best help. However, the following tips are my personal opinion, not always correct.

You can use stronger verb more frequently, it will make your essay more persuasive.
Also avoid repetition of words.
The following sentences which were rewritten by me are only for reference.

Firstly, the advantages of using internet ... (utilize or use)
In the past, before the widespread use ...
(Before the popularization of the Internet, students must attended classroom for learning subjects.)
In this present day, by using the internet...
(Nowadays, as the well-development of the Internet, people can study in long-distance, even at home.)
Many schools and organizations that provide ...
(Providing the Internet platforms by schools and institutes for learning had become common services.)

This greatly helps people life especially ...

(people's) (It significantly enhance the efficiency of people's life especially when they are too busy to buy magazines or listen to news from radio.)

~~And~~ lastly, the use of internet ...