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Posts by MalleyKat
Name: Malicende Lopes
Joined: Oct 18, 2019
Last Post: Oct 18, 2019
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From: Mozambique

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MalleyKat   
Oct 18, 2019
Writing Feedback / Money from parents to encourage their children to become more passionate about study [3]

a good essay, however, please consider the following edits, especially if there is a word limit:

In today's modern world, - presently or contemporaneously,

I, personally, believe that - i believe or it is my belief that

... may be appear when - may manifest..

Secondly, another reason from my point of view - (it has already been established that the essay is based on your opinions)

there are not this motivation - there lacks a motivating drive

To sum up, taking ... - in conclusion, .... (no need to mention aforementioned issues, the reader knows this)

I hope this helps and good luck!
MalleyKat   
Oct 18, 2019
Undergraduate / Multicultural affairs - Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University? [3]

i think the essay was good and very emotive, however, I hope you don't mind my edits.

... a multicultural learning environment largely influenced my application. Hailing from a multicultural background myself, it is important to me to be a part of an institute which is considerate of me. I was born ... I believe that everyone, regardless of race, religion, gender, or social class deserves equal respect and opportunity.

Unfortunately, the environment I grew up in viewed my values as truculent and employment opportunities were tendentious as a result. For the most part, schools were segregated and most religious ... Resultantly, I spent most ... sermon would take place for my community's version of Islam was not acceptable in the country and had to be held in a different location every week.

... at the University. ... and events were directed ... at on campus, exactly what ...
I hope to encourage ... dialogue whilst expressing myself in a manner true to personal beliefs. Be it whilst studying Human Development or attending one of the university's many basketball games, I believe that Syracuse will give ... could not, to exercise my faith and engage in multilateral knowledge sharing and creation.
MalleyKat   
Oct 18, 2019
Essays / For the life of me, i don't know how to answer this Master's Scholarship essay question; DEVELOPMENT [2]

What you expect will change in development terms following your studies

, including: a) the outcomes that you aim to achieve? b) the time-frame for their implementation? c) who the beneficiaries will be? Development Impact part 3 * (250 words)

Are they asking my opinion of technological, market or policy changes in the country and how they will relate to my course, community, etc?
Are they asking about any present construction or investment plans and how long it will take for their completion or implementation?

thank in advance!
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