kaybee19
Oct 28, 2019
Scholarship / Leadership and Influence in urban planning - Making decisions as a leader. [2]
Hello Loreany, to get right into it you can shorten your introductory paragraph as it doesn't add substrate to your leadership example.
Your second essay was off to a good start but the structure of your sentences need to be more straightforward. Remember the Chevening Panel aren't going to spend time deliberating what they think you mean. If they can't understand you, then that's an automatic fail.
Also I can only see one influence example, where's the leadership example? Try to be more specific when narrating your experiences. Even after reading your essay several times i struggle to understand where your leadership skills shone through. I would advise starting from the midway point, you have to convince them beyond a reasonable doubt that you have leadership potential.
Hello Loreany, to get right into it you can shorten your introductory paragraph as it doesn't add substrate to your leadership example.
Your second essay was off to a good start but the structure of your sentences need to be more straightforward. Remember the Chevening Panel aren't going to spend time deliberating what they think you mean. If they can't understand you, then that's an automatic fail.
Also I can only see one influence example, where's the leadership example? Try to be more specific when narrating your experiences. Even after reading your essay several times i struggle to understand where your leadership skills shone through. I would advise starting from the midway point, you have to convince them beyond a reasonable doubt that you have leadership potential.