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Name: Michael Guo
Joined: Nov 24, 2019
Last Post: Dec 1, 2019
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School: A.R MacNeill

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mguo   
Dec 1, 2019
Undergraduate / UBC Personal Profile, List One or Two Substantial Activities. [3]

Hi this is my response to the question below, thank you for any feedback in advance! I'm also not sure if I should expand on the first activity and get rid of the second, or use both.

Tell us more about ONE or TWO activities listed above that are most important to you.


Please explain the role you played and what you learned in the process. You will be asked for a reference who can speak to your response. (maximum 350 words)


When I walked in for my first shift as a volunteer at the senior center, I was on edge, distraught, and uncomfortable in a foreign environment. The fear from making a mistake kept me inside of my shell, and I became shy and preserved. Everything was out of the ordinary and I had a hard time connecting and finding a groove in this new environment due to my high expectations of myself. As I began to volunteer more and learn how to integrate myself in conversations or simple interactions with seniors, I became more comfortable and relaxed. These early conflicts taught me how to approach a situation with care and to pay attention to detail. Once I had established my own sense of being, I began to try and lead others or initiate conversations, becoming more confident in myself and learning from my past mistakes. These conversations were difficult to find common ground on, and tried my problem solving skills and maturity and overall helped me establish a better sense of respect in the workplace with my fellow volunteers and seniors. This experience in working with seniors has taught me many things, primarily the value of patience, an eye for detail, and hard work.

Over the summer I had a wonderful opportunity to participate in the Explore Program in Quebec to learn the French language and culture in Canada. Signing up with my close friends, I knew that it was going to be a memorable summer. As we were placed in our classes in which I did not recognize anyone. This forced me to come out of my comfort zone and make new friends and take the risk. As our classes progressed we became a close-knit community, like we had known each other for our whole lives. This experience taught me how to be an independent person, create meaningful bonds with people, respect our differences and work together to achieve a common goal while having a great time.

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mguo   
Dec 1, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS GT 2 worldwide trend of vegetarianism which supposed to be beneficial to our health [6]

@plforielts

Hi Good Evening, hopefully some of my feedback is helpful for you, feel free to message me anytime and ask for anymore suggestions.

I think that your arguements are well structured but there is a lack of something to state your opinion in the introductory paragraph, For example in the second and third paragraphs, you wrote about the effects of eating too much meat and the contrasts of relying on vegetables, in paragraph two; you mentioned enviromental friendly benefits and etc. I would try and state your arguements in the first paragraph so that the reader has an idea of what your opinion is.

That is just my opinion, and I would reccoment seeking some other source as well, and taking mine with a grain of salt.

Cheers!
mguo   
Dec 1, 2019
Undergraduate / A word that describes me is resilient - UBC Personal Profile [3]

@plforielts
Thank you for the feedback, I agree with your comments i'll rephrase the mentioned sentences to try and encompass those qualities. I will also try and shorten up the introduction so it is more concise and to the point.

Cheers!
mguo   
Dec 1, 2019
Undergraduate / A word that describes me is resilient - UBC Personal Profile [3]

Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)

Resilience



A word that describes me is resilient. I am someone who can adapt effectively and quickly to change, coming out as the best version of myself. My family knows that I am hard to satisfy, and take things seriously whatever the task. If I am pushed down because of something, I don't let myself get discouraged, but work even harder to complete it. My peers would agree that when I have my mind set on something, I am determined to see it through no matter the path that I have to take. In the face of conflict or hardships I simply focus on the end goal, and work hard to achieve it. For example, barely passing a math test in grade ten. The night before I had put in the time to study the material and felt quite confident as I found the course to be relatively easy. As I got the test back, I was shocked to find out my mark, and was blinded by my failure. Soon after, I realized my mistake, even though I felt confident and well studied, in reality I did not dedicate enough time and I got arrogant. From this experience I learned not to fixate on what I did wrong, but to work towards a solution. This simple lesson is something that reverberates throughout my life and is something that I can say that I am proud of, that I no matter the consequence I will rebound from my mistakes.(247)

Any feedback is appreciated :), sorry if the format is wrong, Thanks in advance!
mguo   
Nov 25, 2019
Undergraduate / Camp Squamish Mentor - UBC Personal Profile: Tell us more about an activity & what you learned. [2]

@Kpalacios02
Great response to the question, I would say try to split it into two or more separate paragraphs if you can, one for what this activity was and what you learned from it perhaps. In addition maybe try and reflect on how these skills portrayed by camp members are prevalent in your life and why these specific skills are meaningful to you.
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