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Posts by karmalea
Name: Marilea Canul
Joined: Jan 13, 2020
Last Post: Jan 15, 2020
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From: United States of America
School: Logos School

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karmalea   
Jan 15, 2020
Undergraduate / "adaptable" - UBC application essay----tell us about yourself [2]

Tell us about who you are.


How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)


One word that I believe describes myself is adaptable. I moved from my home country Belize to Moscow, Idaho when I was 12 years old to pursue a better education. I left my parents and family and went to live with my elder brother. I was excited at the prospect of moving to another country, and while it was hard at first, I eagerly adapted to and welcomed my new environment.

One of the major challenges I faced was the gap in math knowledge. In Belize, I had never taken any Pre-Algebra or Algebra courses. So when I transferred to my new school in the middle of eight grade, I was quickly overwhelmed by the new, alien information. I am a person who strives to ace every class I take and, therefore, I was extremely frustrated at myself for not being able to keep up with the rest of the class. However, I kept pushing. I requested help at home and sought help from my teacher constantly; I wanted to get better. In the end my hard-work paid off. Despite my original struggles, I proceeded to receive A's in all my following math classes. In spite of my initial shortcomings, I was able to overcome and adapt to the point where I now enjoy the challenges that math brings.

Thanks for helping!
karmalea   
Jan 13, 2020
Writing Feedback / UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are. (The Idealist) [3]

... a NASA astronaut; only to name a few.
... that never fail s to ...
... specific field to study in college. ... achievements, capabilities and interests, ... importantly, : suited my ...
... true to their lives by her own values and principles; , as I am not shy ...
... provoking insights that provoke thought , as I see ...

I fixed a few grammar mistakes. Aside from that your essay seemed very disjointed. First you talk about your own academic interest and challenges then suddenly go on to talk about you family background and personal beliefs without tying it to the first paragraph; It kinda sounded like two different thought trains. I think you could fix this by moving the second paragraph to the beginning and talk about how your instilled moral convictions have given you a strong desire to be an influence like the people on television.

Frankly, I'd cut out the part about your academic interests(there is another essay question specific to academic interests) and just focus building the first and second paragraphs more. other than that the writing was good, just needs to be more fleshed out. Hope this helps and good luck!
karmalea   
Jan 13, 2020
Undergraduate / UBC application essay--- What is important to you? And why? To respect one another's views. [2]

Some constructive criticism would be much appreciated!

What is important to you? And why?

(maximum 250 words)

As I have grown and been exposed more to the world around me, I have noticed how hostile people are with one another. I attended a classical christian school, and in my 4 years there I was exposed to their ideas and worldviews. I learnt how the majority of the christian world regarded different people of society, from the LGBTQ+ to political leaders to blatant criminals. I have heard them use the stereotype "Angry Atheist", sincerely believing that to be the truth. I have also seen members of the #metoo and feminist movement put themselves on a pedestal and feign victim hood to get their way. I have seen racism and crimes shamlessly brushed away and sometimes encouraged. There are several problems currently facing humanity from climate change to the many thousands of people living in poverty and under dictatorial regimes.

There are many people around the globe working tirelessly to solve these problems but I think that we will never fully achieve those goals until we come to respect one another. We may not share the same beliefs or worldviews but as long as ideas such as racism,sexism, etc. are still prevalent in society, we will never fully solve these problems. Personally, I believe it is important to respect and love the peers around you. While me may disagree with one another, we ought to still respect one another's views. And, rather than try to push our 'enemy' down we should strive to find the truth together.
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